"I was free to wander the world as I saw fit. I would avoid the clichés and the “normal” things to do in my predicament that countless others would jump upon to perform. I was like them in some regard but different in others. I would not make it my purpose here to meet inhabitants of villages and cities of brick, but instead to walk to amongst the residents of forests and deserts and plateaus and wherever my feet took me. I would explore this world not to meet the individuals within it but to meet the land itself."
Basically someone is in Equestria and wants to explore it and not get wound up in a someone elses story. Instead they are following their own journey and not some action packed storyline. They want to see Equestria itself.
Chapters (2)
Hmm, refreshingly different so far
Finally, a focus on the environment rather than the ponies. The environment can be just as interesting as the ponies, if not more so depending on temperament. You're off to a good start, keep going!
What's this?
A HiE story that doesn't involve the main character being attacked by a manticore in Chapter 1, fighting an ancient evil, and wooing one of the Mane 6?
Devil best get his PJs cause hell just froze over and you earned a Gold Star.
I must read later hHHHNGGGG uhh good
Sound REALLY interesting, image link pls?
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For the display picture? I got it from here http://www.sendspace.com/file/vmyzjc just click start here to download.
grammar mistake?------->"I looked around for the forest floor and picked any berries..."
This is pretty great so far, other than that certain part at the end (where it shows he knows where he is; felt to abrupt)
Also, the music was VERY fitting; in fact so fitting that I started reading the story out loud!
Can't wait for more of this unique story
Interesting.
I like the concept. Sort of an HiE version of Austraeoh, I suppose. One issue I'm having, though; this is a first-person fic, but your character, at least thus far, has literally no personality. Maybe you're just planning to use him(?) as a vehicle for world-building, but I can imagine this story getting boring quickly from the point of view of a person like this.
And that's another thing; for a fic that's going to focus entirely on the environment of Equestria, you have very little actual description of what's around him — just the bare minimum to say where he's going. Like, the entire first day, despite all of the walking he apparently did, all that the reader gets to hear about is how unsure he is about every thought he has. He just 'talks' repetitively about what he doesn't know, that he might soon know it, and that he accepts the fact that he doesn't know it currently.
All in all, I find the idea behind this fic interesting, but the fic itself (at least up to this point) monotonously introspective.
Well that was different... I like different! Looking forward to more.
Though there was one thing that my mind seemed to focus on.
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Wouldn't that mean that he's walking back to where he was?
1189364 No, with the sun at his back, his shadow is in front of him, and thus he's walking forwards. Although... the sun's position does change over the course of the day, so maybe it's more like he's walking in a semi-circle...
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Well if Equestria's Sun is like ours then it sets in the West, if that's the case then if the Sun was falling at his back then it would be setting. Then the next day it would be on the other side of him at the East.
For the most part the Sun goes in a straight line across the sky, so wouldn't his shadow just do a 180 and be on the other side of him than it was before he stopped walking?
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When he starts walking it is still relatively early in the morning and so if the sun is behind him, then he will be able to walk towards his shadow. If he did keep on following his shadow then he would go back and forth (like you said)
Also the lack of actual description of the land and lack of personality are things that I will go into more detail. Thanks for your opinions :)
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Thanks, didn't notice that
I haven't read anything pony like this. I look forward to reading the rest as it comes.
I am intrigued.
A thumb,
and your star are now yours.
This is something along the likes of what I would enjoy to write myself, but never get/got around to. Great work. And fitting music, as well...
Going to leave this here...
Is there going to be any more chapters? Sounds (from what ive read so far, barely a couple of paragraphs) its really interesting, a break form the whole traditional (and albeit stupid sometimes) HiE formula
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Yep, there will be
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Cheers :)
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I quite like his view on the world, I quite like how you're barely describing the environment around him, why?
Because it's organic, it seems slightly more real than the rest. He seems not to care to much about where he is now, only about where he's going and I like that, it truly sets the theme.
It also has a sense of mystery, like the land around him and this makes the story seem more, mythical I guess? Like a story a wise man would say around the campfire. I truly, truly enjoy this style.
Hah, Grylls style.
Damn you and your interlude, I want a real chapter.
Wonderful.
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Yeh sorry about the short chapter.
IB takes up most of my time
interesting... plese continue good sir