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Well to answer your author's note. I have a couple of questions:
Thunderlane is a guy right? Why does it say here that Spitfire is referring to him as a girl? At first I thought Spitfire might have mistaken the pony outside for a mare, but then the next paragraph mentions her checking HIM out, so I'm confused.
Also:
Spitfire became a guy? There might be more instances of this in the fic, I only really had time to skim it. I can try to read through later and see if I spot anything else.
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Like i said, i write my stories in French and translate into English directly. So, if i have time, i've tried to make possible for a better comprehension.
And for making simple, Thunderlane is always a stallion and Spitfire a mare in this story, gender doesn't change at each sentence
Spitfire goes through sex change between sentences. In story description, no less.
Improper capitalisation. FimFiction has a good writing guide for situations which involve dialogue and narration.
This sentence doesn't work in English at all. Not only a bond between 'voice' and 'impatient' is broken, but 'confined space' is really an odd detail here.
What's that supposed to mean? Fantasies usually don't involve much consequences.
What?
Narration jumped from past to present tense.
Then again, I should probably stop right here. Languages don't work this way most of the time. Have you tried to read your own story in English?
Okay, no qualms here. This phrase is very amusing.
🙃 She seems strangely okay with the fact.
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Hye, i read all my story in english and tried my best for change some errors, thanks for taking time to comment some of these