A peaceful evening gets exciting, as three little
fillies participate in the greatest battle Equestria ever witnessed through
out its long history. Well, maybe not Equestria, but just Apple Acres.
And maybe not "through out its long history", but "since last Friday".
A slice of life story about simple joys of being a kid.
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A battle of true epicness. The whole of Equestria trembled at the clash of the *tiny* titans.!
Loved it beyond words.
Love it a battle for the ages if ages mean every Friday afternoon
Well written but strange that you use hyphens instead of quotation marks, is there any particular reason for that?
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Not really, I'm just used to seeing hyphens indicating speech, especially dialogues(- Hi, Tavi! - Hey, Vinyl!) and seeing quotation marks in internal monologues (Fleur-de-Lis was walking down the catwalk, ignoring cameras flashing and catching her every move, all the while thinking: "Another day, another show, another crazed fan sneaking backstage to ask for my hoof in marriage. If this is all there is to life, than I might as well run away and become a hermit.")
Been awhile since my high school days, which was the last time I've actually studied proper punctuation. And that was in Russian. I've never studied English punctuation properly (should be mostly the same though)
Good story! One small note: Rarity's magic is blue, not purple.
Very fun read.
A fun story. Your writing was perfectly understandable, but would benefit from editing by a native English speaker. And definitely use "quotes" instead of -dashes- to mark dialogue.