Strange things have been happening in the little settler town of Appleloosa, and Braeburn has been caught right in the middle. Tremendous earthquakes have rocked the deserts, the buffalo have been acting suspiciously, and a new arrival in town has left Braeburn questioning the life he thought he had.
(Note: This story is incomplete. I need feedback, comments and suggestions on this story, as I hope to someday finish it. Later reveals in the show will likely necessitate changes as this story was begun in August of 2011.)
Chapters (7)
Bahahah! I love it! Great paragraphing skills, btw. I'm looking forward to more of this. Gonna read now now and let you know what I think.
Hey thanks! Yes, any feedback at all will be greatly appreciated. I want to make this story the best it can be
Moar! Are you planning on showing us what happened with Braeburn and Marmalade?
Yep, Braeburn's past will be delved into at a later point in the story
Well, that's all I can share of this story so far. Hopefully you enjoyed reading, and hopefully I can continue writing this soon
Good stuff, mang. Again, I'm not sure how much help I could be. I think if I could write as well as you do, my stories would be more popular
Haha thanks
I'm only a few chapters into your first story, but it's pretty cool so far 
Honestly though ANY feedback, even spelling mistakes, would be greatly appreciated. So much work has to be done on this story so anything at all would be of great help
Hooooly crap. This story is so well-written that I don't think any suggestions from me would be better than what you have planned. Definitely some buffalo/pony fisticuffs in order, though.
What I think: I do like the way Braeburn and Strongheart seemed to 'crush' on each other slightly
but I don't think very highly of him having a twin sister, fanon or not. 
What to improve: It never matters to me, pretty much anything goes except like-gendered shipping, Spa
rity, Fancy
Fleur and other hetero couples I otherwise can't like.
I'm thinking it ought to be "Git yer fat flanks out here..." since they have them on both sides of their rear, wouldn't you think?
Also,
He'd make that sound if he were a donkey or mule, not a pony/horse.
Again, he is not a donkey/mule and wouldn't make that sound.
- Ya hear?
Please don't do this; I can't stand when writers think that for some reason they need to do this.
Hello from 2017, you have here a right good yarn and I was hoping you might bring it back, I suspect that Starlight isn't from equestria, and might not even be a pony at all. I'm curious as to what the bighorn sheep have to do with things, and I'm rather ashamed to admit it, but I'd like to see how braeburn fares at lying his way out of this mysterious guest of his. The only errors I noticed were small errors in grammar, spelling, punctuation, and a few word-choice issues. The best example I can recall comes from the scene in this chapter where Braeburn and Starlight are cleaning up after supper, you used the word desert when you ought to have used dessert. I look forward to seeing more and best of luck in your current and future endeavours.
Sincerely, BirdsBooksBrownies