I'm not sure how this will help us defend Zion from the machines, but it's awesome nonetheless.

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Um, why did i click that.

The red pill was totally worth it

If ya know what I mean?

Steeling her resolve I see what you did there.

1168290 THAT........ is fucking epic.

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Oh my...

That was great!

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The red pill is always better.

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yes

an excellent chapter to a personal favorite fic

That... was lovely. Actually.
It was the perfect mixture of innocence, cuteness, and overall an endearing scene. And sexy, of course. That one is quite important.
I certainly wouldn't mind another scene like this in the future of Green.

Dat Ending! If you know what I mean.

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Y U NO call it blue pill?

1168794 because the stories are called Red and Green >.>

Well at last I see what you were saying when we were chatting about the *cough* climaxes *cough* of this and Uni Days. Apparently those years of pining were definitely getting to them.
Now that I have that out of my system... Wow. Just, wow. While there are parts of this that come fully expected, it still had large sections that surprised me. Perhaps it's because I have read a VERY limited number of 'mature' fic scenes, but I did not see the horn fellatio coming (I swear I'm not trying to make a pun). Somehow I imagine that 'sparks' have a much better taste than... Well, you know.
Some antiquated language, but it was used for the sake of romance and such. I also truly enjoyed the small jab at 'purple prose' in most romance and especially in mature scenes. Made me kick myself because I know I'm one writer that's very guilty of 'purple'.
Also, because I can't NOT say anything about it: really? Sneaking your penname into the sex scene? Now that I made the obligatory facehoof, I actually found it quite funny, but that's because I'm not someone who reads these scenes to become sexually aroused, but to follow the character development and prose instead.
Not that I want to read more sex scenes, but I do hope we get to see one at some point that has a 3rd person limited Fluttershy narration. Her actions in this were quite interesting, and I'm curious what was going on in that head of hers. But that's the beauty of well-written chapters like this. We get enough detail to paint the portrait, but enough ambiguity to let our imaginations run wild and create our own fantasies.

Great work and good luck with what comes next!

That was very well done you did well

1168847 Um... yeah the penname addition... my proofreader sometimes takes liberties while editing. I laughed when I saw him do it so... it stayed.

Wonderful, simply marvellous, just spectacular, now I must have more!

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Either way he should be punished with a 1000 hour banishment to space camp. Gotta have a sense of humor about those things. Taking things seriously gets dull.

~munches red pill~ i34.tinypic.com/27zbvrn.gif

That awesome moment when you have more comments and views in the 'Red' version of Chapter 14.5.

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Lovely chapter, I ravished every bit of it. As much as the wait was longer, this definately prooves it was well worth it.

Oh and, that Chengar Cloud Kicker...

Cheers!
~Kyor

i took the red pill, then i chugged the whole bottle for more. seeing nothing more coming forth i was rushed to the hospital to have my stomach pumped. thanks, no i really mean it!

Funny that you should mention Cloud Kicker in this (however briefly) since I just got up to date with 'The life and times of a Winning Pony'. I know this story has nothing to do with that but I just thought it was a funny coincidence.

As for the actual chapter, it was nice and passionate but perhaps just a little too dialogue heavy. I think sex scenes work best when the actions speak louder than words, if you know what I mean. Also I like the idea of Fluttershy's juices tasting like cider. Cidershy is best vulva.

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The red pill is always much better than the blue, as the blue is a suppository

Can I get a bottle of these red pills? Very good chapter, fluffy and erotic in a very satisfying blend.

I just can't get over how perfectly your fic title here works with a friend of mine's fic: Remorse: Color of Crimson. We're planning on having quite a few sensual moments (ones that I've written a few different possibilities for already), and the name of your fic fits extreely well with LoneWolf's.

Mind if I steal it?

And I do mean that, really. Crimson's the main OC's name, but Pinkie calls him 'Red' quite a bit. We also use 'Red' and 'Crimson' to show his conflicting thought processes. 'Red' gains control whenever he's calm, or more (or less, to be honest) passionate. When he's angry, scared, or worried is when the narration will say 'Crimson'. It's not been questioned or even asked about by our (somewhat small crowd of) readers, but I think it's because it's pretty obvious.

... Dammit, Rambling again. Peace out, Steel! We can resolve this later!

YES! 100th like!

Now, I haven't read this because it's not my cup of tea.

But I'm pretty confused atm. Why is this fan-fiction on the "new" list? 100 likes and 25 comments starting 10 hours ago? Did the system go haywire or are you popular enough to keep it un-published for that many people to read it?

Just curious.

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Yes I realize that.

are you popular enough to keep it un-published for that many people to read it?

I suppose he is popular enough to keep in under wraps.

Masterpiece. I love you. v The ony people UI have said that to so far is Crowley and you. Keep it up.
DopeySpike

BIGGEST BONER IN CLASS EVER! BWAHAHAHAHAHA

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Oh... my...

so your aware i thumbed this down just so i could give it 2 thumbs up....yes it works that way and if it doesn't......well it does now

1172337 thank you

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Awwwww.... you stole my idea! Thats okay, though. honestly, i came (no pun intended) here for the story... And it did not dissapoint! Another awesome chapter, Steel!

1173174 That happens to me All. The. Time!

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Awesome. Simply awesome.

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Did you know that you were the first person to ever reply to one of my comments? If only there was some way i could express my happiness through text..............
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>Red: The Color of Passion

so THATS why the "mature" tag is red!

1173490 dat Spitfire...

Hahaha, fluttershy's scream was so loud, rarity could almost hear it.

Wow, I'm sure glad girlboners - even the ones that fall firmly in the "raging" category - aren't generally as noticeable as their penile counterparts, or I would've been in for one hell of an embarrassing train ride, courtesy, once again, of one Mr. S. Resolve.

Although I do pity the poor soul who will be forced to occupy this seat after I've vacated it... Ah well, at least it'll be warm.

(You're getting some kind of sick, twisted thrill out of doing this to me, aren't you? )

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I... didn't actually realise I'd made that joke. My punning powers are so strong I can't control them any longer!

No you idiot, PINK is the color of passion!

This was great :D

Rarity would be proud.

It's like that ancient -and arguably most well known of all pony r34- of RariShy horn fellatio is dna template of all RariShy clop.

I'm afraid I'm going to have to be unoriginal and just quote Rarity for my response to this chapter:

"“Yes, yes, a thousand times yes!”"

I'm surprised Chengar isn't here yet. Clearly, Fluttershy's... ideas came from a 'winning' source.

Oh, Angel.

I think I took too many of the red pills. The rabbit hole was rather... moist.

MOAR!