Mood Whiplash

It was a genius plan: give somepony a birthday present the day before their birthday. It's a surprise nopony would ever see coming. At least, that was the idea as far as Apple Bloom had figured it. However, while she's trying to find someplace to hide her sister's present, she ends up on the receiving end of an earth shattering surprise of her own.

Cobbled together for the April Wincest Contest.

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Random Order #1 · Apr 24th, 2019 · 1 · ·

HHHHHHNG THE FEELS

Mossy Pages

Mossy Pages #2 · Apr 25th, 2019 · 3 · ·

Ok, that end was GOOD.

Wolftamer54

Wolftamer54 #3 · Apr 27th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Please let there be a sequel. This is just begging for a follow up. Also great job, loved reading it.

The Cloptimist

The Cloptimist #4 · May 4th, 2019 · 3 · ·

Sweet Celestia's shitbiscuits, I'm the bastard.

Well, I'm going to try and work that into everyday conversation now.

I really liked this. One thing I would say is that Apple Bloom does seem to vary in how youthful and naïve, or older and cynical, she is - some of her thoughts and dialogue are those of a very young filly, while at other times she sounds more like Twilight - but other than that, the story was great, there were some genuinely lovely moments, solid gags... and, welll, Luna! Wow, Luna. While at first I thought she was acting out of character, I quickly came to love this sweary, sarcastic, so-done-with-this-shit version of her!

"...Also, butt horning feels pretty good. I'm just sayin', is all, y'know, if you ever get the chance. Maybe wait a few years first, and don't eat any solid foods the day before. Buy gold! Diversify your portfolio!"

She's magnificent. I want more Wildly Inappropriate Luna traumatising foals in their dreams! Write more!

xRei