Rainbows pot of gold

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Darksonickiller

Darksonickiller #4 · Apr 18th, 2019 · · ·

Looks someone cant take criticism. Deleting comments makes you look bad

jlibbey12

jlibbey12 #5 · Apr 21st, 2019 · · ·

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Oh I can take criticism it's jus the last guy was complaining about parts of my story even though every complaint and question was answered in story and I told him this

Halira

Halira #6 · May 15th, 2019 · · ·

I haven't given this a full read through yet, just gave it a quick glace over and noticed that the spacing between paragraphs felt a bit weird, which is a common problem with new writers.

Try to keep spacing between paragraphs and separate people speaking double spaced between. I noticed at some points you don't double space between paragraphs and at other points you triple space or more. If changing scene you can put a page break in or do the further spaced, but don't change scene too often or it gets a little messy to read.

Will look over the actual story later and give feedback on that.

jlibbey12