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Cosmic Flare
New to it all but love it all hope to do something to give back you all have giving me.
Cosmic Flare
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If you don't start next chapter with "General Kenobi" I will be disappointed)))
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yes yes I agree (after reading it)
Just waiting for more
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Hmm ...
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Don't worry. I have two other chapters done and ready with the next almost done. I made buffer chapters before so then I can go back to my other story.
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I have been thinking about the general grievous line and I think it would -in the context- be appropriate to say the line but with Princess Celestia rather than general kenobi
Hmmmmm.... *sips black coffee beside celestia* Proceed
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Oh ok
Can't wait to see how the next chapter pans out
ah I get that reference now let me rebuttal with this one
Following total atomic annihilation, it will fall upon you to uphold the vision of this great nation
S.P.E.C.I.A.L spells out that you're quite swell
This...needs an editor. Very good and has a lot of potential, but there were a lot of grammar mistakes.....
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I miss commas
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I did notice that when I glanced at the last couple paragraphs again....Sometimes it made it hard to tell what was going on, I completely spaced in the first paragraph when it mentioned the cat, as I had forgot the cat's name...and existance....till I got reminded.
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I didn't get to this level but yeah, the grammar errors are relevant compared to the lack of commas, I saw maybe two or three only in this chapter, but I really like this story and I am used to worse
Why would you make him become female? You know what... its your story i'm just disappointed you didnt make her a futa. You still get breasts but keep the shlong.
Moar!!!
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Patients my pets. You shall get your crack. But first we must wait for this... Diamond in the rough. He he he he muhahahaha! Ack! Mmh swallowed a fly.
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easy now. It's a joke not a rubber cookie. It's coming. Just taking longer than I like it to be.
It LIVEEEEES
Reeeeeeeeeee
Just got done reading every chapter up to this point. Really enjoying it so far and hope to see more soon when it is ready!
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Thank you. I do have another chapter. It's long. But I'm going through it to change it. But working on a phone for grabbing paragraphs and moving around and picking things out is hard without a computer.
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Ah, yes, moving does seem to be difficult at the best of times...EDIT: Ah yes, moving paragraphs and writing can be difficult at the best of times... lol I will wait patiently for its update. And yeah working on a phone while writing can be difficult as well, considering auto correct is a thing... I know all about it. I've had to re-re edit things i've wrote many times because of it... So take your time the story has been fun thus far.
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Thanks. Like I just noticed before take off in this chapter. Auto correct changed with to Wii. Hopefully I can do it.
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lol yeah, it just takes time when using phones to write. Lots of back tracking and re back tracking to make the phone understand. "HEY! I want this word you dumb electronic!" LOL
This is a great story and I hope it comes back soon.
Apologies. That was a false post. I was going to edit but it's a small button near the publish one. The struggle with phones.
I'm gonna go ahead and guess you have a lot on your plate when it comes to having a life and haven't had enough time to actually upload a new chapter Right?
Interesting story so far. It could do with flowing a bit more organically. Like why did they turn the MC back into a stallion already if they were fine with being a mare and why was there already a big time hop when they hadn’t figured out living arrangements and a bunch of other world building things.
When did cosmic become male again I like when he was female
I like when he was a she
Jumped too much, there's no buildup for this chapter, almost to no explanation, and, as Aiwhisper said, the main character was fine with his/her arrangement. That's not to say that Faust herself said that there was no turning him to his original gender, and now there is?
Well, now we know who won the lottery.
I noticed that our protag has a lot of rage, raging at the dust, the stains..... unless you meant rags