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With new developments, I'd encourage you to look a little more closely:
But with an Epilogue... Anything can happen now.
so many feels!
... sounds like Metamora's dying... I sure hope not...
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What makes you say that?
She's not. I promise.
These last few chapters have been feeling very over blown and oddly shallow. It's like everything is kinda just rolling over and each conflict barely puts up a fight. It's kinda like you had a bunch of ideas but are in such a rush to write them down that each struggle is over in minutes and there is little question what will happen for very long.
The time in the hive could have been drawn out as Em holds onto the bare threads of life while they struggle through recently blasted ruins to get to find the love stores, hoping they are still there, fighting doubt, exhaustion, and moral quandaries along the way, Chysalis's trap could have been so much more drawn out and epic only to have the ponies lose in an unexpected twist, the dark magic could actually have some sort of real effect other than some random BS magic mulligan, maybe making Em question her love for him after he commits some terrible acts on some rear guard or possibly even herself in his dark rage making his later use and then restraint on Chysalis actually kind of significant.
Just so many things feel cheapened because you didn't take the time to play them out or have some hard, terrible mistakes or mishaps that makes readers question how things could possibly come back from that and how it has left scars on the characters in so many ways. Instead, we got a lot of rushed cliches.
Don't get me wrong, I've enjoyed a lot of the story, but these recent events feel stilted and forced.
This story is very good, very good chapter, you have my congratulations, keep that thumb up, if this is an ending, I liked it.
So the next chapter will be with anon either here or the afterlife
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Curse you and your ability to predict predictable things before they happen!
...But which one.
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Hotdog
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Okay, this is epic.
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Even Discord can happen! Oh, Discord, you rascal, that's not how reality works! *1950s laugh track*
Grieving period over! Let's move on, shall we?
Why dont Anons dick compel the Dimension to send him back... Odd...
Harsh times... To bad no decent event let to it...
Nice tragic chapter