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It sucks, but they're not wrong. Trying to make contact with humanity at this stage would be...fraught, to say the least. And that's assuming EQG world is Phillip's Earth, and not some other parallel world.
Doesn't make what they did to him any better, but at least they (even if "they" is only Twilight) had his best-interest in mind.
The needs of the many outweigh the needs of the few... unless you are the few then the many's needs just look like hypocrisy.
Daaaaaaaaaaamn
I think this is the last chapter for me. They're knowingly stealing from another world, Twilight is fantastically out of character if she isn't doing everything in her power to make this right (look at what she did for a friend whose party she missed years prior), Celestia is still a tyrant, and none of this makes sense.
9603075 I have to agree. This story paints Equestria in a very poor light. Twilight has done far more for far less. If she isn't lecturing Celestia on how these actions are basically kidnapping, extortion, and theft, then the plot twist better be, That Celestia and Twilight have been replaced with Changelings.
Even with the massive OOC characters and poorly thought out plot device. The story is in general rather slow and lacks any real investment in my opinion. By which, I mean it's not really very fun or engrossing to read. I gave it several chances to change, maybe hit a stride or something, but alas, I feel it has fallen short.
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I guess you dislike diaries-of-a-madman
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Not familiar with it, other than the journal I kept as an angsty teenager. That could qualify as the diary of a madman. :)
I loved this chapter. I know that the ponies are supposed to be "fairytale" perfect, and there's a lot of pressure to keep them in character. Boring.
Seeing the other side of a character while still keeping their personality is hard, and I'm on board with your version. Twi isn't perfect, we've seen many examples. It was great seeing her moment of doubt pushed to the forefront without one of the Mane 6 there to provide a hackneyed escape for the author. This is real, she's her own pony with her own faults and shortcomings.
Fleet is also finally moving forward unconsciously, and discovering more about herself without breaking her established personality. This was great, cheers
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Check out "Diaries.." it's one if the most read stories on the site. Also, one of the longest at nearly 3M words
To be honest, Twilight's, as well as the other princess', reasoning behind not letting him return is pretty terrible. In its entirety it's just flat out under thinks things while overestimating a vast majority of whatever is left. Easy explanation for going missing, in short order, could amount to wanting to travel and see the world. There are tons of examples that are more believable than the excuse used for not sending him back. Even further, we're talking about the US, which if anyone has paid attention to in the past decade they'd know that there are sooo many people here without even a shred of paper evidence to their name. I understand it's a story, but the premise takes away from the story in that it's now set that whatever comes from here on out doesn't really need to happen, but is rather artificially forced. That leaves a bad taste in my mouth.
That'd be said, I still like the story. Don't have to like every detail of something to enjoy it.
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Not really. When you boil it all down, it's a very similar situation to Green Isn't Your Color. It's implied that Phillip would have gone along with things, if they explained it to him. Meanwhile, Celestia thinks he'd be happier if he didn't know about the whole thing, because she can't realistically let him go home either way. And Twilight knows they shouldn't keep it a secret, but she doesn't want to betray Celestia's trust.
I'm still iffy on what transpired between Philip and the princesses.
I can buy the security and diplomatic concerns that the ponies have about revealing themselves to Earth.
I can buy that Twilight made a mistake in trying to hide the truth from Philip.
But I'm not so sure about the logic of what's been conveyed to Philip after he'd found out about the portal.
Do they really need to get involved if Philip cannot reintegrate seamlessly on his own? Him spilling the beans about Equestria is more likely to get him landed in psych ward than the government launching an investigation into magical ponies.
And I don't really buy the idea that they care so much about him that they'd get involved just to rescue him from depression if he had trouble reintegrating. They've already demonstrated that they're willing to put Equestria's needs ahead of Philip's, so why is Twilight framing it as if Equestria is morally obliged to intervene on his behalf all of a sudden?
It looks like a false dichotomy between keeping him in Equestria forever or revealing themselves to Earth, when there's a third option of just letting him go home and washing their hooves of him.
Of course, the wrench in that third option is that Equestria apparently wants to keep going back, for technology. And to be fair, there's a tiny chance that some people might start paying attention to the portal if Philip spills the beans. Perfectly understandable.
But if that was the case, then it also means that Twilight and Celestia are being disingenuous about their main motive for detaining him. It's not because they care about his wellbeing. It's not because they're worried about the security threat. It's because their desire for human tech outweighs their security concerns and Philip's needs.
It's an utterly human thing to do, and it is in stark contrast to the ponies who supposedly live in a world where friendship literally is magic. Talk about tonal whiplash.
This part is driving me nuts.
Is it Equestria Girls or not? And is Philip really a native of EQG?
His name suggests he isn't but they're talking as if that is his native universe. But then Twilight's line there implies that the Human Six are there, too. Are they just sorta similar people to the Mane Six, or are they literally human equivalents of the ponies? Does Philip have an Equestrian counterpart? How much of EQG's events are canon to this story? I have so many questions!
Also, Twilight's and Celestia's statements about diplomacy and security sound kind of hypocritical if Sunset and Twilight are actively visiting/living there and fraternising with native humans, especially if the Human Six already know that Sunset and Twilight are ponies.
Ok,pretty sure that somebody would find out about the teft . you cant just get info on these systems and the components needed to build them without someone getting suspicious. Plot armor was the only thing keeping magic hidden in eqg, othervise they would be all in some hidden lab.
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Five more chapters until we've circled around to the beginning, and the romance part of this starts in full. Kinda.
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Thanks for remembering Twilight's dependence on authority figures.
I can only imagine the conflagration that contact would cause. Racists and xenophobia would run rampant. And the unconstrained greed of corporations would fantasize about looking at all those resources left all untouched.
Okay this chapter is really running thin on making any real sense. They are afraid of letting Philip back because his return to his world would raise questions? But a person named Twilight Sparkle or Sunset Shimmer doesn’t? What the hell is really going on? Is this Equestria girls world or our real human world? Because in the Equestrian Girls universe absolutely no one has normal human names. They all have silly pony names, and are all different colors.
Or is Twilight and Sunset using aliases? Different identies? No one is noticing some random people coming and going, disappearing for long periods of time without raising any questions where the hell they went or who the hell they are? You really got your worlds messed up! What world is this so called human world?
I think this needs to be established first because right now I am totally confused. Also stealing their technology and no one is noticing this? Or is Twilight just sitting in front of some computer for hours on end browsing the internet? I guess all this for the plot device to get Philip and Fleetfoot together in the sac so we can pick up where the the first chapter left off. Which was a pickup where the last story left off, and even then that makes about as much sense as what we got now. Interesting to say the least... I will keep reading to see where this goes.
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9603611 I agree. Equestria Girls is not Earth. EQG humans look different, have different names, and a different history. If you're trying to blend the two, this must be explicitly stated, because not doing so leads to all sorts of confusion.
As for keeping the portal safe, here's what you do: send Philip through blindfolded, or knock him out, then teleport him at random to another location in the U.S. That way he doesn't know where the portal is, and his chances of stumbling upon it are lower than the average Canterlot High student. I thought about this for all of 30 seconds before coming up with it, no way a team of ponies missed it after working on it for a solid year.
However, if Philip is from Earth and NOT Equestria Girls, they're two different versions, then it's an easy explanation: it's not his earth, and there's duplicates of everyone over there that would make diplomacy crazy difficult. Honestly, this is so straightforward I'm having a hard time believing you're refusing to use it.
The mirror conflict is hopefully over and we can move to the good part. More philip and fleetybee!
I enjoyed the last story a lot, favourited it even, and I've got this far in this story in a single day. It's cool to see a HiE from the pony perspective and it's been a pleasure to read.
Until the last two chapters.
I've read the comments and I've seen the justifications that the author and all the editors have put forward, but they're rubbish. The reasoning here is simply unbelievable, the size of conspiracy simply to large and the characterisations simply to bizarre for me to continue. In two short chapters it's gone from possibly becoming one of my favourite fics to one I won't continue. There were so many other narrative options that could have been taken, that I feel would have been better.
It's your story, so do with it as you like. But I'm getting off here. Fleetybee? No, Fleetybye.
Spitfire would be too enamored with Spike to try and make him professional. And it's a shitty situation to be, especially when you're trying to pick a proper side that doesn't turn anything into a war.
So Startswirl was using Earth as a dumping ground for all the unspeakable evils the ponies couldn't handle? And now the princesses are stealing tech and music and god knows what else. Pretty dark for a romance story.
In this fic, Equestria is clearly the baddies.
If they want his forgiveness, then they need to compensate him by giving all the proceeds they made off the technology and or media they stole. However, that depends if it is truly his Earth and not the one found in Equestria’s Girls.
Only if you apologize first, and mean it. I don't care if what was done was considered "necessary", It was still wrong. Frankly, I think this whole thing is overblown. Let the dude go home, and let the dice lay where they lie. Celestia says that Earth "isn't ready" for Equestria, but I disagree; Earth will probably never live up to Celestia's standards, and that's a poor showing on Celestia's part.
What ticks me off the most is that dude can't even see his own family. That is just... ugh. At the very least, bring his family to Equestria so he can be with them. At this point, I would go so far as to call it unlawful imprisonment.
Why don’t they let him integrate into Equestria? The 24-hour guard watch is concerning to me. They could let him choose a town and start a new life. Let the monitors be from a distance instead of in his face every minute. I get maybe they think he’d bolt, but it wouldn’t be an issue with some time, soul searching, and if they leveled with him -I don’t think.
Yep, this is where I’m jumping ship. I really wasn’t expecting it to come to this; it was honestly a great story and shaping up to be something great, but this chapter just destroyed everything. I couldn’t even finish it. The last chapter really wasn’t that bad, since it could’ve easily been explained that Philip was mistaken and that he just misunderstood what Celestia meant, but this one just confirmed that Celestia, and now Twilight, were smacked with the stupid stick, and the effects were permanent. Other people have commented on everything better than I can, though.
Oh well, time to move on to better stories.