A storm has come over Ponyville that wasn't caused by the pegasi. No pony can clear it. Not even Princess Celestia. In the middle of the cursed storm, Scootaloo struggles to understand why she doesn't have her cutie mark yet and finds herself the sole member of the Cutie Mark Crusaders. When she learns what's causing the storm, Scootaloo will soon learn that this information is far more trouble than it's worth. *Entry for EQD's NaPoWriMo* Edit: Name changed because of confusion. Sorry!
Chapters (4)
I like it so far. ;) I'm definitely going to keep an eye on this story.
Well. What a coincidence.
Same story name.
That first line scares me that you may have seen story, but that might just be me being paranoid.
Right?
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This is the only mistake I saw. Good work, unique! keep it up!
unicron
"I need you're help getting to Canterlot."
Unicorn spelled wrong.
It's your not you're.
You need a proofreader, but this is good nonetheless.
Another mistake.
She knew that Applebloom and Sweetie Bloom would always support her and be her friends.
Sweetie Bloom?
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NaPoWriMo involves one thousand, six hundred words average per day. Minimum. Not much time for proofreading :P
Anyway, I'm glad to see a fellow author dedicated to their work...
why am i writing about writing instead of writing
The three of them had gotten themselves into louds of trouble.
I believe you mean 'loads'
It would be awesome if Scoots joined the wonderbolts
good story i like to see where this is going
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Pardon me for asking, but what other story? I'm not aware of another story that is familiar to this. I apologize if I am a bit familiar to another story. I had no actual idea.
Loving this, you write quite well.
Keep it up!
Yay, new chapter! And finally a story with the Shadowbolts! :)
Shadowbolts eh?
Headcanonized!
1025218 I do wanna point out that the Shadowbolts were in the show. Although, I guess I did make up Luna and Celestia being in charge of the different teams.
1025435 mhmmdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_grin.png
1025470 Completely random question, but where'd you get the BonBon emocon? I dun see it.. (granted, I'm new to this site and I'm still learning)
1025772 *sigh*
I will have to copy another comment I made...
There is a script for Greasemonkey (greasemonkey is an addon for firefox and chrome) that gives you new emotes. It gives you new emotes. Including default (the ones from this site), awesome faces (dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png ), Silyfillies (dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rarity.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Sweetie_Belle.png ), shrugponies (dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png ), miscellaneous (where I got the bon-bon emote (dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_smile.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_RageFace.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_dayum.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/discord.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy_umad.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png )) and DEVIANTART YAY! (e.deviantart.com/emoticons/moods/neutral.gif )
It also adds new features to the text box, such as a preview button, quote button, youtube button, and a text size button!
Quite a few spelling and grammar errors, but I like it.
For example. Disguested, she sat up and backed away only to trip over another pony. Did you mean 'Disgusted' ?
Which of these sleeping lumps was her teammates? Team mates and 'these' are plural, while 'was' is singular.
So it should be: Which of these sleeping lumps were her team mates?
Also, I'm not sure if teammates is all one word.
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Thank you for pointing out mistakes~! Again, I don't have time to check for errors and unfortunately, I use WordPad so I can't automatically check these things. I'm trying my hardest to look for errors and correct them. Thank you again. I'll make sure to correct these errors.
Hey guys, thanks for all the love. I don't know when the next chapter will be up. I'm not into it right now and I made a rule for myself where I shouldn't write if I'm not enjoying it. It never turns out well if that's the case. I doubt I'll make the word limit by the end of the month. I might not even finish the story. However, I promise you all that if I don't finish the story by the time NaPoWriMo is over, I will still continue to work on it. I'm not going to just leave it unfinished.
Thanks again.