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I'm the worst; I'll destroy your heart. I just want to get better at writing and show people what they want to see, so If you have a request, I'd be happy to hear it.
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Damn Nature! You scary!!!
What is RGRE? Also, the intro is a bit repetitive about the setup.
it's not terrible or good it's just decent which I do wish to find out the next chapter...
9151080
Reverse Gender Role Equestria
RGRE š
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I hope I can make it sexy too!
9151080
Sometimes I have a hard time including every piece of information I want without being recursive. I think part of the repetitiveness comes from having written the story first, then based the intro on its setup. In the future, I'll write the description first, then write the story; that way I can avoid having a description that simply restates the information give in the story's intro.
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"Just decent" is how I would describe a lot of my writing too. I've got a second chapter focusing on Maxilla in the works. After that, I'm not sure if I should continue this, or focus on something else.
9153766
That's not what I mean. The first paragraph of the story is made completely redundant by the (better) third paragraph that covers the same events.
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To become a better writer is always to complete stuff than leave it be... You must complete it no matter what critics will say... If you let critics get you down then you'll never be a better writer... To be the best writer is to start to finish most writers here never complete their fiction and all it does is sits there and dust.... If a person finishes it... then it's proud to be good at least.... depends on the author...
I read a lot of fictions lately and most of them are good but, sometimes it's just to good to be true as I wait for a long time with others and then they never write them ever.... it's clearly a pain in the butt. Evictus completes his stories but, hes terrible at writing... But a good person with good grammar and never finishes it is another thing. The thing I hate most are click bait reads. Where they never finish them such as most 2013 ones or some even 2012... goodbye fiction rest in peace.
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How is it made redundant? I intended it to give the basic premise of the story, making sure readers knew exactly where and when this takes place in cannon. I feel that some of the content of the first few paragraphs is made redundant either by being stated in the description, or being implied by some other piece of information that has already been established.
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I know what you mean about the unfinished stories form years ago. So many of them are a great concept that cut off partway through its realization. I wish the authors would at least change their stories to a canceled status.
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The first paragraph establishes these facts:
The third paragraph establishes these facts:
The sixth then establishes that they're in the Everfree. Thus, the first paragraph, which only serves to establish story setup facts, is made redundant by later, but not very later, paragraphs establishing the same facts. Additionally, it's very awkward because the first and third paragraphs cover the same time period, and yet a story is expected to be in chronological order by default, so it makes for a sense of deja vu.
Damn always love castration stories, I hope you will add more of those in this story, keep it up.
While castration isn't my cup of tea, I now had the weirdest boner now.
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I will! I want to include some other stuff as well, but it won't be at the expense of the mane themes of ball snatching and floraphilia.
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Mission accomplished!
Yea, because when you come across some strange plant in the magical monster forest, the first reaction is to stick your dick in it.
Let's see if the rest of the squad is smart enough to learn from "his" mistake.
good work, you have to check a bit on double text ore minor misprint.
like the way how the plant works, good description. the Scientist in me is very fascinated ^^
Iād like to see a new chapter please
hmmm the fiction is almost good just needs a bit of fixing and stuff... Even I did have a lot of problems with my fictions but, I went back and try to make it better like seven times... it takes a while and it clearly can put the person say i'm done... yeah I been there.... rough times... This story however is 7/10 the idea for it is impressive... most writers like me forget to put in details or put present tense or future tense ( if i ever did it OMG i should go back and try try again unless i'm finished editing and can't do it anymore xD ___) or even to show and not tell... there is a lot of different kinds of english that we live in... American, great Britten, UK, and yadadayadada you get the picture... yeah many people would be like ooo ouch... which each english represents their own country...