This story is a sequel to After the fight
Within the after the fight universe. But you do not need to read the prequel to understand 98% of this.
General Dash lost a lot in the war. But perhaps the heaviest on her heart is her adoptive sister Scootaloo.
Today is her birthday.
Inspired by a part of the Avatar: the last airbender episode "The tales of ba sing se."
Dame this hits right in the fells.
Poor rainbow and irho
Stony Creek is a place name & should be capitalized. Three walls isn't a place name & shouldn't be capitalized
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Is Scootaloo dead?
I bet she's dead. I mean, it's trying to be vague, but it just spells out the fact that Scootaloo fucking died in this war and Rainbow Dash is sad because feels.
Does "inspired" in this context mean "I stole it wholesale"? Looking at this and the synopsis for Tales of Ba Sing Se, seems like you ripped off The Tale of Iroh, but without the subtlety or grace that made A:TLA good.
Maybe I'm just jaded at this point, but the whole thing feels forced. Ungodly forced. Hard to feel bad when I already know what's going to happen, but you know, I skimmed over the thing. Needs a proofreader.
eh....i read this and realised i can THINK up more tragic situations, which is honestly frightening to me