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BronyAugustus


Lives in Prattville Alabama. Currently attending High School. Hopes to be a history teacher and hobby writer. Also a definite brony

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Vinyl scratch is haunted by the past. Memories of a war half a decade ago still hurt her. She carries on just to stay alive. She no longer wishes to live. With no home and no money, she's given up. But there's somepony who refuses to give up on her.

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While insert-character with PTSD is a pretty dam played out plot, you did a good job on this chapter.
While I could nitpick this one a lot I feel like if you just keep this short and sweet, it can come out just fine.

"Listen, Vinyl, I'm not going to try too change you like last time."

Common mistake. "Too" means either "also" or is used as an intensifier, as in "too much", "too cold", etc. Otherwise, you mean "to".

Because if you show so much as a hoof to the enemy, you'll join them in the mid and blood until you die

I think you mean "mud"

My dad was a WWII combat vet. He was one of the liberation forces at Dachau (major concentration camp) & part of the clean up crew. It wrecked him for life. One of the things I learned is that some of the people you pity in the abstract are DAMNED hard to pity (or even tolerate) up close and personal.

Thanks for the point out. I don't have editor at the moment. And thanks for the story. I have tried, with my few resources, to create some degree of accuracy. Any input is welcome.

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