Step number one of any story on fimfiction: make your chapters longer than a thousand words. This goes doubly so for clop fics.

The short description is almost the example of what not to put as your short description.

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I tried to but it just didn't strech well imo and they didn't really fit togther as 1 chapter.
and thanks for the feed back

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There we go, I just did there

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ok, Thanks for the feedback

Too much ASS

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Have you tried adding detail? I know, crazy suggestion.

Your short description needs to actually describe what happens in the story, not apologize for its quality.

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What can I say, I might read just too much of Bendy's fanfics,

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I thought I did?

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Ok, fixing it now

is it bad that when i read the tital and the description i almost expected this to be writen by Bendy?

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Here's a tip, you can use [hr*] without the * to break up sections within chapters

They look like this when you up them in without the *

Sorry but I stopped reading after 2 lines very hard to read try edited or Prof readers

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I probably subconsously made it a rip-off (kind of) of Bendy's style,
They make some of the best clop fics.

Proof reader and editor seriously required

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Thanks for the feedback