972954 She was cumming. Twilight and Dawning Light were cumming together while Light was on top of Twilight. It's that simple... And I thought it would be sexy.
SSP: i came up with the cliff part. i thought it would be nice to put a cool scenery in the readers mind. that makes sense, right?
973060 hey art if you need an OC character for any story, i have one you can use(because i can't make a story to save my life),but i have yet to name him.
And boom goes the dynamite! What a sexplosively divine love scene Twilight and Dawning Light got involved in! Some people say sex is not love, but this chapter begs to differ.
This goes out to the five people who disliked this fic. Please let me know what I did wrong and what I can possibly do to make you change your mind. Thank you.
As the author, I take each view, like, dislike and fave very seriously. I try and reply to each comment because I care about the viewers, each and every single one of them. I believe this story has the potential to be a work of gold in the fimfiction community and would appreciate it if people who like and enjoy this story helped me out by giving referrals on their face book, linking this story to friends, or other means of informing people. Thank you. Chapter 6 should be out by tomorrow. If not, then the day after.
Edit 2020: XD
It's like looking back at a really, really bad bicycle crash... only a whole lot of other people saw it, too. All you can do now is laugh.
Again, a good Chapter! Hehe, i wonder what will be Celestias first Reaction, if she find out Twillight is in love with a ancient Goddess and she find out, that this spezial Goddess is her own Mother! CanĀ“t wait!
976282 well, that explains a lot. fun fact, if you've read my other fics and compair them to this one, this story is actually very light with the clop fics. i barely get into any sexual parts until chapter 5. oh well.
The heavenly feeling of cumming for thirty strait minutes was incredibly amazing-> I think it should be straight, right? The sun rose and shined its light upon the forest.->shone Also you forgot to capitalize Light when she told Twi to simply call her Light.
Sorry but the idea that Twilight just accepts this with no argument, says nothing to her friends and that they all want her is just making Dawn way too mary-sueish for me. I mean Dawn appears out of nowhere seduces Twilight and then knocks her up and Twilight questions nothing? says nothing to any of her friends...sorry but this gets a thumbs down from me.
Well I really hope Celestia and Luna doesn't find out about this, I don't know how they would react but I don't think it would be good, also is Light giving Twilight certain spells? Because I thought how magic works is the more power you have the more powerful the spells you can cast.
Table of thought text's for ch.5
Silver = Dawning Light
Purple = Twilight Sparkle.
Please leave positive comments. No bull crap. Constructive criticism is appreciated. Thank you for the feedback.
Oh Twilight, always trying out new spells.
As always, nice chap.
972782 thanks.
972787
But I must ask, how soon, if at all, will Celestia be appearing in this fic?
972815 actually, next chapter!
this is a very interesting story. Good job!!...but i wonder, what happened to the first Earth-pony and Pegasus
972872 Earth ponies and pegasi were around in the beginning. They were the first creations of the gods. Then came the unicorns.
I was just thinking, the hell was Twilight doing under Light for ten minutes?
Twiddling her hoofs?
Maybe ask her how her day was (OH WAIT!)?
God forbid she starts to sing Winter Wrap Up.
972931 no...no problem
972954 She was cumming. Twilight and Dawning Light were cumming together while Light was on top of Twilight. It's that simple... And I thought it would be sexy.
SSP: i came up with the cliff part. i thought it would be nice to put a cool scenery in the readers mind. that makes sense, right?
972955 did you delete your comment?
973004 why..yes...yes i did
973033 well... okey dokey lokey!
973001
Awww, you killed it, and here I was trying to play the part of Sexually Oblivious Rhino.
This is why we can't have nice things.
973060 hey art if you need an OC character for any story, i have one you can use(because i can't make a story to save my life),but i have yet to name him.
973085... killed... it...
973096 no thanks. im good.
973160 no problem just(just throwing it out there, because i can) :D
973190thats cool.
965620 uhh sure ah guess
973251 SSP: YAY! *hugs* thanks!
And boom goes the dynamite! What a sexplosively divine love scene Twilight and Dawning Light got involved in! Some people say sex is not love, but this chapter begs to differ.
The end part was so divine and so sexplosive, this song came to mind: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IRk_D1UMPsI
After that holiest of "holy cow, that rocked her world" moments, Twilight definitely knows she's not alone!
That awkward moment when a bookish unicorn gets more action than you...
973320 ATug, you so crazy, but i like that!
973382 lol, sorry
973416 it's ok *forever alone ;_;*
973452 and i just finished *play time* withmy SSP... that awkward moment when both the main character and the author gets more than you...
600 views! 70 likes! ... instant wing boner!
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973467 ;_; pshhh, I don't need a man and I don't need to be sad cuz ponies
973628 man?... your a girl?
973646 idk, what would big mac say???
973826 ... ye...n... uh... i dont know
974115 well, I'm a girl :)
This goes out to the five people who disliked this fic. Please let me know what I did wrong and what I can possibly do to make you change your mind. Thank you.
As the author, I take each view, like, dislike and fave very seriously. I try and reply to each comment because I care about the viewers, each and every single one of them. I believe this story has the potential to be a work of gold in the fimfiction community and would appreciate it if people who like and enjoy this story helped me out by giving referrals on their face book, linking this story to friends, or other means of informing people. Thank you. Chapter 6 should be out by tomorrow. If not, then the day after.
Edit 2020: XD
It's like looking back at a really, really bad bicycle crash... only a whole lot of other people saw it, too. All you can do now is laugh.
974614 Lol, I thought you were a guy. Anyways, nice to know my fans aren't just dudes!
Again, a good Chapter! Hehe, i wonder what will be Celestias first Reaction, if she find out Twillight is in love with a ancient Goddess and she find out, that this spezial Goddess is her own Mother! CanĀ“t wait!
974840
974633 it's ok. Some guy said the same thing. Mlp fans are mostly guys so I don't blame you for thinking I'm a guy
974625
Its a clopfic, for some enough reason to downvote it.
976282 well, that explains a lot. fun fact, if you've read my other fics and compair them to this one, this story is actually very light with the clop fics. i barely get into any sexual parts until chapter 5. oh well.
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The heavenly feeling of cumming for thirty strait minutes was incredibly amazing-> I think it should be straight, right?
The sun rose and shined its light upon the forest.->shone
Also you forgot to capitalize Light when she told Twi to simply call her Light.
978655 ok, fixed it. thanks
YAY another fabulous chapter also great job on the story art inspired so far its been a fabulous read
973411
For some reason, that song makes me want to dance like this: gifsoup.com/webroot/animatedgifs/732190_o.gif
please post more at your earliest convenience
SCREW MANNERS... I WANT MOAR NOW!!!!!!
Me looks at Twilight and Dawn and thinks: HI HO SILVERRRRRRR, AWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYY.
Rainbow: Who was that mare?
Twilight: A friend. Veeeeerrrry good friend.
Rainbow:
Sorry but the idea that Twilight just accepts this with no argument, says nothing to her friends and that they all want her is just making Dawn way too mary-sueish for me. I mean Dawn appears out of nowhere seduces Twilight and then knocks her up and Twilight questions nothing? says nothing to any of her friends...sorry but this gets a thumbs down from me.
Well I really hope Celestia and Luna doesn't find out about this, I don't know how they would react but I don't think it would be good, also is Light giving Twilight certain spells? Because I thought how magic works is the more power you have the more powerful the spells you can cast.