Oooohboy ohboy, this is gonna be an interesting one for sure... and I have a sneaking suspicion about what they're gonna do hahahah.
They're gonna go out into the storm and bone during flight...?
Another damn fine chapter, and ooolawdy, those other mares are simply gorgeous looking, and two of them got a bun in the oven eh? Color me curious and hopeful for fun times with those four mares, just unnnnf. Good show Max, good show and keep it up!
Also hope you get better soon being sick sucks ass. #WellWishesForMaxiPad
This was a fun little chapter. Liked all those characters and their mannerisms. I'm also glad this came out before I headed off on vacation. Hope you feel better, and you know where to find me to torture me for your amusement.
Lovely chapter, I loved the restaurant scene. I thought for sure Velvet was going to start hitting on him. LOL I really enjoy how you’ve portrayed the Pegasi and Bat Ponies, being more open and casual about sex.
“Got to give it to the colt,” Freefalls coos. “He knows what he wants!”
Especially in these spot. There was no condescending remark, she was just stating a fact. On top of that the unwritten acceptance that it’s fine for Windy and the protagonist to be together, even though Windy is old enough to be his mom. I’m tempted to add this acceptance to my own works, to be honest.
A pair of flight goggles rest over her eyes, and she has a weird kind of harness on around her withers and barrel. She smiles and holds out a second pair of goggles. “We’ve done it the normal way…
8961981 Actually, the way "She smiles and holds out a second pair of goggles. “We’ve done it the normal way…
“...now, let me show you the pegasi way.”" is written is accurate. There's a line break, but the same pony is talking, so you don't close the first set of quote marks. English is weird.
I really enjoy the story I do wish the colt was a Pegasus. In the 1-4 chapters it mentioned his dad cast the cloud walking spell was his dad a unicorn or a earth pony just curious.
Oooohboy ohboy, this is gonna be an interesting one for sure... and I have a sneaking suspicion about what they're gonna do hahahah.
They're gonna go out into the storm and bone during flight...?
Another damn fine chapter, and ooolawdy, those other mares are simply gorgeous looking, and two of them got a bun in the oven eh? Color me curious and hopeful for fun times with those four mares, just unnnnf. Good show Max, good show and keep it up!
Also hope you get better soon being sick sucks ass.
#WellWishesForMaxiPad
Max, take all the time you need. Get better. What you write is worth the wait.
This was a fun little chapter. Liked all those characters and their mannerisms. I'm also glad this came out before I headed off on vacation. Hope you feel better, and you know where to find me to torture me for your amusement.
I was expecting at least one 'EEEEEEEEEEE' from the bat ponies, I'm disappointed in you MadMax
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Then you didn't read closely enough. There's one in there alright. I made sure of it.
I guess this colt is about to join the mile high club.
you had my attention, you now have my curiosity
Hm this is gonna be interesting
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God damn it, you're right! I'm just blind!
Is it time for him to join the mile high club
Love where its going man, yea take your time and get to feeling better.
SHE MADE LOVE LIKE AN EAGLE FALLING OUT OF THE SKY
Very nice chapter here. Found a couple things you may want to edit.
If they're at the bottom of the glass, I think they're more sitting than floating.
And you may want to place "her" between the two.
A Quotation mark at the beginning of Oi? Or an apostrophe mark at the end of Windy?
Quotation mark at the end of the sentence?
Other than that I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Do you think the colt is one of the first in his class to lose his virginity?
Hope you get to feeling better soon, Max.
Lovely chapter, I loved the restaurant scene. I thought for sure Velvet was going to start hitting on him. LOL
I really enjoy how you’ve portrayed the Pegasi and Bat Ponies, being more open and casual about sex.
Especially in these spot. There was no condescending remark, she was just stating a fact. On top of that the unwritten acceptance that it’s fine for Windy and the protagonist to be together, even though Windy is old enough to be his mom.
I’m tempted to add this acceptance to my own works, to be honest.
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So, in short, being a pegasus is awesome?
Awww, that colt will be drawing all the pretty young mares in his school in sexy poses, won't he?
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Actually, the way "She smiles and holds out a second pair of goggles. “We’ve done it the normal way…
“...now, let me show you the pegasi way.”" is written is accurate. There's a line break, but the same pony is talking, so you don't close the first set of quote marks. English is weird.
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Fair enough. I didn't know about that. English is weird.
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If you do, I’ll be interested in seeing that play out.
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Is someone forcing you to eat Pineapple on Pizza?
No, don't think so.
I'll eat whatever the hell I want.
You do you though.
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Pineapple on pizza is heresy? I guess I must be heretic of the century then ‘cause I love me’s a good Hawaiian pizza.
So... When’s the next chapter coming?
Dang she is a popular pegasus! It's like the whole town knows her!
Kid, it's time to join the Mile High Club.
Featuring The Twilry Tango and possibly some bellyriding.
You're gonna soar high, kid,
Yours will be the lightning strike that pierces the heavens!
I really enjoy the story I do wish the colt was a Pegasus. In the 1-4 chapters it mentioned his dad cast the cloud walking spell was his dad a unicorn or a earth pony just curious.
YEEEEEAH!!!
Mmmm fish. And now we're hungry.
She stole his cherry! 😂😂😂