Another adventure is in store for the Mane 6. But this time the cutie map has called all six of them and the next friendship problem is in Ponyville? Does it have to do with three new comers who arrived? What's their connection? And what caused them to lose their friendship? This may be the biggest challenge for Twilight and her friends yet. Will they be able to solve it?
Wonder if that was actually
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What do you mean if that was RD? Do you mean the legend?
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What do you mean if that was RD? Are you talking about the legend?
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Racing with the griffons? Yeah, that sounds just like vintage or prime Rainbow Dash.
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Maybe these Griffons weren't all that fast, but I would not say prime RD.
Why are you rewriting this story?
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Because I haven’t touched it in awhile and felt I needed to reinvent the story a bit and fix up the earlier chapters
This is pretty good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
I'll be willing to see Flamebolt do more training with Scootaloo along with more of your upcoming chapters, and remember:
The secret is to believe in your dreams and potential to be like your star. Keep searching, keep believing, and don't lose faith in yourself.
Here's a song that will make you do whatever it takes. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/HcNcOnIkQQU?si=RURoegBR7540a7ix
How dark and serious is this story going to be?
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Thanks :)
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Not that dark, some blood here and there, maybe a little physical violence but not super dark
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You're welcome
That's okay and I can't wait for Flamebolt to do more wing training with Scootaloo I want her to fly and be strong.
Here's a song that will make you natural. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/V5M2WZiAy6k?si=TDz3IYG9z_k_Asiu
Oh no! I hope the Mane 6 will try to talk to General Ironwing of what he said to Flamebolt.
Here's a song that will make you a believer. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/Ru7ffOoSN4U?si=auiq7OuMKgv9gmT_
Whoa, that was one serious backstory from Flamebolt. It's time for the Mane 6, Scootaloo are going to bring Ironwing down and prove Flmaebolt is innocent.
Here's a song that will make feel the thunder. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/DDOrNeBpsKs?si=CtbYc9BYq4_5thtS
Uh-oh! Not good! (Bitting my nails in fear)
Those Mane 6 have to stop Ironwing before things go out of hoof. I hope they'll stop him in your next chapter, McThriller. I want to see them, and Flamebolt put an end to his evil deeds once and for all.
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Find out soon lol
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And I will
That fight was insane and AWESOME! Also, I wonder who that voice was when it was talking to Flamebolt. I better wait and find out, along with seeing Flamebolt doing some training with Scootaloo and the fillies in the orphanage, which I'll be willing to see that, McThriller. I want to see Scootaloo start flying.
Flying constantly reminds us that we can overcome obstacles with determination and perseverance.
Here's a song that will make you rise up. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/y7dy9z-jTxM?si=CwRtEfCY7UW1NsJI
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Thanks I tried, yeah we’ll see what that voice was about and I’m sure Scootaloo and the others will be happy to learn from Flamebolt and see some results
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You're welcome also, thanks for following me
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No problem I appreciate the support you given me for my story, it makes it easier to want to continue
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Okay thank you
That was the most heartwarming and amazing chapter ever, McThriller. I can't wait to see what Flamebolt will do next. Maybe he could do some more training with Scootaloo and the fillies in the orphanage or hang out with Rainbow Dash, but I'd better wait and see.
Also, Flamebolt and Rainbow Dash being close made my love meter go up to 20 percent.
Here's a song that will make you say it's time. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/NASqUELHjPE?si=-PRMm9C2WjKfhUuf
Whoa, that's a lot to take in, and I'm happy to see Scootaloo doing a good job on her flying if Flamebolt keeps training her, along with the fillies in the orphanage as well.
Also I wonder who's that stallion talking to Granny Care Care I better wait and find out.
Here's a song that will make you radioactive. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/w3viBe2Q0P8?si=WZacDHpoS_Ozt7hd
I wonder what the message says. Scootaloo and the orphanage fillies will stay strong and keep their heads held high. I'm thinking in your next chapter about having the orphanage fillies, and Scootaloo start working on doing some wing-ups to keep their wings big and strong if they wanted to protect themselves from the Suits.
Here's a song that will make you say ready, aim fire. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/mlF9cEOCD4g?si=qsj_pILAw7XakpxI
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We’ll see, I’m trying to progress the story a bit more cause I wasn’t sure how long this was gonna be, gotta start filling some plot holes and more introductions are needed
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No worries, I'll wait
I wonder who is this wisp-like pony? I better wait and find out, along with Flamebolt to be alright.
Here's a song that will follow you. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/1DoI5WTjd3w?si=z__N-HyKlti0Q5rd
Whoa, and I can't wait for part 2
I hope whatever they will say to Flamebolt in your next chapter he will understand.
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What did you think? Of the whole dream journey that happened?
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It was crazy, but there was a bit of bravery after that, so I liked it.
That was nice of Scootaloo to comfort Flamebolt. Also, I wonder who that unicorn stallion is. I better wait and find out.
Also, make Flamebolt have the fillies in the orphanage and Scootaloo do some wing-ups. I want to see how great they will be, along with some other exercises that Flamebolt will make them do.
Here's a song that will give magic to your bones. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/DYed5whEf4g?si=5spKkFGHIHSS7IXK
(Gasp) (Star eyes) Scootaloo calls Flamebolt her big brother. That's... amazing! Also, holy moly! Twilight made a gym for the orphanage fillies and Scootaloo to train!? AWESOME!
I can't wait for 'Coach' Flamebolt to train them and Scootaloo on their wing-ups; I want to see their wings big and strong.
Here's a song that will make the fillies and Scootaloo warriors. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/fmI_Ndrxy14?si=ToZQkbxwI2qTEP9q
Two new chapters?! AWESOME!
Applejack meet Echo Drop and Fluttershy meet Duke Shire. I think they'll do great with them and I'll be willing to see how Coach Flamebolt is doing with orphanage and Scootaloo on their exercises. I want them to do their wing-ups along with other exercises they will attend to do.
Here's a song that will make see birds. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/vOXZkm9p_zY?si=5gRTwOSTrah0vSLS
I think it's great! And I'm seeing how Echo doing well with Applejack and Duke is doing a good job with the art and sketch with Rarity and Fluttershy along with Flamebolt doing an amazing job training the orphanage filles as well. I can't wait on seeing Flamebolt do some training with Scootaloo I want to see how well her will turn out.
Here's a song that will make your story gold. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/fDXbk1vziqQ?si=G6MRfUjcxcmce_r-
Oh boy I wonder what will Echo say to Duke, I better wait and find out in your next chapter
That was emotional, and boy, the four mares have no words to say about it. Flamebolt already told the girls about his past, and if he sees his old friends are back, I don't know what reaction or what he will say to them.
Also, I wonder how Flamebolt is doing with the orphanage filles and Scootaloo. I bet they're doing a good job with their training, and I'll be willing to see that.
Here's a song that will make the orphanage filles and Scootaloo children of the sky. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/LvlaxcjtV9U?si=6K97HhqKlgozRMuM
Oh boy, either Flamebolt will run up and give them a hug or say nothing.
This story is great so far, and I like it!
There’s another option, but you won’t know for the next month
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Don't worry, I'll wait
Whoa, that was rocky start. And I wonder who's this mysterious stallion, I better wait and find out in your next chapter
Oh no! Rainbow Dash! Scootaloo! Where did the stallion took Flamebolt to. I better wait and find out in your next chapter
The bearing hollow shell lingers hopes of its once filled within.
Outward put a striked figure, whereas a cloaked its thoughts and yearn.
Hopeful and willing for the progression brought about Sir McThriller.
Both us writers and such a reader, I - examine for tales of knows and implied.
The story I noticed a pattern. A pattern of consistency where the cast members are at the period circumstance shown, had displays of support a prevalent part of the storywriting.
Often than not this is a relatively normal gesture - however, the re-enacment of the same expressions side-by-side scenes corresponding from one group to the next. This feature had shaken little of my perception regarding your written material.
This I had to point out at this stage phase of character progression because this move to express could get tiring quickly for some readers.
I apologise if the criticism I had endowned my upset your thoughts, however, I am simply conveying what may be seen uncreative in future updates.
Good Evening Mcthriller,
May the striked ink, dry before parchment stale.
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I think I got what your saying, sorry I’m not very elegant with the English language, so basically I shouldn’t repeat the same scenario from different perspectives cause that would be boring, so if I want to change perspectives then I should just continue on from the point of what happened in the scene? I appreciate the feedback since I don’t really get any.