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Sapphire Rose 12


"Throw me to the wolves and I'll return leading the pack."-Unknown

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Everyone in Equestria is assigned a personal clock to tell them when important things in their life are going to happen. They'll tell them when they'll finally reach a goal they've hoped to achieve and even when they're going to die. The one that most ponies look forward to is when the clock chimes for meeting their true love.

Sweetie Belle is terrified of her clock. Most clocks in Equestria have reasonable hours. Most clocks in Equestria go off at a reasonable time. Sweetie Belle's clock tells her she'll die at the age of twenty. The one that tells her when she'll reach her personal goal is completely stopped and the one that tells her when she'll meet her true love... is chiming.

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Comments ( 8 )

Interesting, I would like to see where this goes.

Telling your story in medias res ("in the middle of things") was, for me, very effective. It adds mystery and makes me want to know what will happen next. Great job!

Hmm, not bad. I look forward on seeing more.

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I'm glad! Thank you for reading! :twilightsmile:

Great job! I'm curious to know what is going to happen next! Reading what these clocks can do gives me mixed feelings about them (which is a good thing!). Knowing when something good or when something bad will happen is exciting for the former and nerve-wracking for the latter. Again, great job!

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Thank you very much for the kind feedback! I hope you continue to enjoy it! :twilightsmile:

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