Time has forgotten him, but when Luna returns from the moon, he comes back to Equestria. What zany adventures will this ancient being get into once he returns to a peace-loving land?
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Bon Bon... what are you doing.... stahp
Wait, what Farming Game? FS17? Cattle And Crops (though that's not actually out yet as I recall...) Also, great chapter as always.
...Is this one of those fics where Bon Bon has a pet tarantula?
the Long Patrol. Red wall reff. ????
8412136 - Yonder: The Cloud Chronicles
8412178 - Actually, 'its a ref to those Cloud Kicker stories.
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Huh, I don't know that one. How do you like it?
What the funds are not going to a complete rage game that makes people (and ponies) froth at the mouth? ππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππππNOOOOOOOoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo.
Jk we all know that the money goes to fund your great scheme to over throw the Great Trollestia
It's official. I'm not sleeping this night.....
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Don't stop
8412229 - Haven't played it yet. It's supposed to basically be a cross of Zelda and Stardew Valley. And I love both those things/
Probably playing Stardew Valley
Does the other member in Monster Hunter organization count as family? Or could it be her father?
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Ahh, that'll be why I've never heard of it. Never played any Zelda and Stardew never held my attention.
Don't you mean NEEDS a new aspect?
So I hope this isn't going to sound overly-critical, but maybe try to dial back the lovey-dovey side of the story a bit? It's something I see in a lot of stories, when characters enter into some kind of romantic relationship. They start to over-emphasise this, like we're going to forget they're in a relationship, if they aren't doing something romantic every chapter. Romantic relationships also need to be able to flourish in the more mundane ways too, just being around each other, in a companionable manner, for instance. You were pulling that off pretty well, but as I stated above, it feels like you're also putting a bit too much focus, on Aspect's romantic relationships. Relationships that have the characters, going off to do something romantic every day, to reinforce the romance. Well I see that kinda relationship as not lasting in the long-term, unless you're building up to that, in which case, you're doing it well.
Maybe focus on Aspect teaching, revealing more of the world and old magic, changes to Equestria etc, for a bit, with some smaller doses of romance in there, that makes it clear, the relationships are strong? Maybe I'm just overhinking it, but if my opinion helps in some small way, that's cool too. Just wanted to get my thoughts and opinions out, on this chapter.
i am really liking pup he is fitting in to the story really good.
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This story is, for the most part, about Aspect and his reintegration into society. (i think)
As for the romance stuff. I'm inclined to agree that it should be turned down a notch.
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Yeah I agree that the primary focus is Aspect reintegrating into Pony society as well as making his own mark/change upon the world. Pup is the latest example of his changes, finding a new aspect for Earth.
I think this is supposed to be 'not' unlike any other, because the next paragraph is;
I just realise something... did Rarity know Rainbow Dash has a sex life? Because she seemed to have a feeling for Aspect before, I can't think that once she know RD is in a herd relationship with him, she won't try her luck as well.
I am still expecting her to become the fourth member of this realtionship with how she acts around and towards Aspect
The cute comment with Fluttershy has me hoping that she will join his herd. I haven't read beyond this chapter at the time of this comment so I guess I will find out.