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Three Ponies Went to a Bar

Behold, one of the worst fan... no wait, am I already put the description before?
What's the differences anyway?
Three stallions walked to a bar. Soon, they would have an adventure. Or would they?
They wouldn't
Mar 15 : Yay, 50 views! (Confetti)!

Author hint : I mean three I mean three OCs, not Twilight, an OC, and Berry Punch

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HoneyBadgerr

HoneyBadgerr #1 · Jan 31st, 2017 · 1 · ·

Sweet Jesus. Run this thing through Grammarly or something. You have enough typos and grammar errors to drown a fish. You might want to ditch the strikethrough's as well. They really detract from the story. You also keep switching back and forth from brackets to braces. I couldn't even read the actual story, all of the errors and inconsistencies made this pretty much unreadable.

If you have a friend you can use as an editor, maybe have them take a look at it and double check your writing. As an alternative, there are several writer support groups with editor volunteers who will help you if needed. Good luck.

DicyMath99

DicyMath99 #2 · Feb 1st, 2017 · · ·

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Hey, what do you expect from a writer who live on a country where English is not the first language.
Btw, laughing IS the best medicine. I'm talking about your comment.