Oh man. Every time you release a new chapter the story just gets better and better, which makes my internal debate on whether or not to add this to my favourites fiercer and fiercer. On the one hand, this story is really, really good. It's honestly one of the best stories I've seen on this site in my years of browsing.
But on the other, I simply cannot get the glaring out-of-characterness that Princess 'fuck ALL the stallions' Cadance displays when bedroom habits come up out of my head. It's made all the worse considering that literally - and I mean literally - everything else about your writing and storytelling so far is damn near flawless.
This chapter was amazing though, I'm really looking forwards to Celestia's emotional fallout from her 'date' going the way of the Titanic. Here's hoping she gets another chance with Fancy Pants at the Masquerade Ball, he's a pretty cool guy and I want to see Celestia happy by the end of this.
"Your Highness!" Fancy Pants attempted to cover himself with the loofah, despite already being fairly covered with suds in Celestia's private bath. "One of the servants told me I could clean up in here, but I didn't realize--"
Celestia closed the bathroom door behind her and regarded the soapy stallion with a calculating eye. "Actually, I was needing some assistance to get this goop shampooed out of my mane, anyway. Perhaps..."
As Fancy Pants scooted over in the walk-in shower and began to smile, Celestia could feel a matching smile rise to her own face.
Whoever that servant is, they're going to be getting a promotion.
“It's already very fashionable. I dare say, if you wore your mane like that in public, I'd soon be hard-pressed to find a single mare in Canterlot who didn't also adopt the wet mane look.”
Or maybe she had run away, laughing, as soon as her mischievous plans had been set firmly in motion. Had she planned all of this? It wouldn't be impossible. Twilight Sparkle was a very meticulous planner. Oh, she would have some very stern words with Princess Twilight once she found that pesky little alicorn!
What kind of words? Like "I'm disappointed in you." or rather "To the mooon!"? (Not sure which one would hurt her more.)
8343660 Honestly I’m not sure why Twilight would think she could improve the looks of Celestia’s magical, flowing mane that resembles the likes of aurora borealis.
8343173 Little surprised you went with Fleur being Fancy Pants' daughter, but I won't condone the choice.
Also surprised that Celestia's hoof fit into Fancy Pants' wine glass. I know you said Fetlock, but that's behind the hoof and wouldn't reach deep enough to touch the wine (wine being often poured no more than a fourth of the glass's height).
I feel like if I tried to get a date, things would go at least this bad... probably ten times worse.
her: so... what do you do for a living? me: [cough] oh, um... I uh, I work at a country club... her: that sounds lovely! me: [wincing] as a glorified janitor...
and then there's:
her: where, exactly, do you live? me [thinking]: she's either an ax murderer or a thief- wait, I can't tell her the truth, she mustn't know I still live with my- me: [aloud]: I-I live across the river, in an apartment in an old house. Victorian, even, I think. pain to heat and cool.
and let's not forget the coup de fucking grace:
her: what kind of hobbies do you have? me: erm... reading... her: m'kay. me: writingfanfictionswatchingendlessyoutubevideosdebatingtheoriesaboutthetenbilliontvshowsIwatchonline her: [pause] what? me: I mean... I'm... I'm totally into... sports! yeah, sports. I just love it when they... do that... thing... with the ball? go team! am I right?
8345611 1 - Replace 'glorified janitor' with a better-sounding title like 'custodian'. 2- "I have a room up on the west side. It's not much, but it's a really historic house." Move out of your mom's basement if possible, so that you can take a special someone home with you if you feel like it. 3- Develop a hobby that's worth being proud of -- one that doesn't consist of consuming entertainment products. Archery, painting, juggling ... hell, maybe just pick up a cheap Miata, take it to the autocross a few times, and say your hobby is being a race car driver. How cool is that? The most important key to becoming good at dating is to make yourself someone who people would want to date. Self-improvement is more important than having good answers to obvious questions.
This has been your unexpected and un-asked-for relationship advice for the day. Please forward any comment and complaints to Random Unwanted Advice, Inc.
Fleur being ANYTHING other than Fancy's wife makes me feel like this needs an AU tag, and this is DESPITE the fact that their exact relationship has not been defined in canon.
Heck, I even had to double check the transcript of Sweet and Elite just to be make sure there wasn't any lines about that.
Well. That certainly could've gone better. I wouldn't want to be in Twight's hooves when Celestia finally locates her.
Oh man. Every time you release a new chapter the story just gets better and better, which makes my internal debate on whether or not to add this to my favourites fiercer and fiercer. On the one hand, this story is really, really good. It's honestly one of the best stories I've seen on this site in my years of browsing.
But on the other, I simply cannot get the glaring out-of-characterness that Princess 'fuck ALL the stallions' Cadance displays when bedroom habits come up out of my head. It's made all the worse considering that literally - and I mean literally - everything else about your writing and storytelling so far is damn near flawless.
This chapter was amazing though, I'm really looking forwards to Celestia's emotional fallout from her 'date' going the way of the Titanic. Here's hoping she gets another chance with Fancy Pants at the Masquerade Ball, he's a pretty cool guy and I want to see Celestia happy by the end of this.
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In her ... hooves?
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I'll win you over yet! ^.^
"Your Highness!" Fancy Pants attempted to cover himself with the loofah, despite already being fairly covered with suds in Celestia's private bath. "One of the servants told me I could clean up in here, but I didn't realize--"
Celestia closed the bathroom door behind her and regarded the soapy stallion with a calculating eye. "Actually, I was needing some assistance to get this goop shampooed out of my mane, anyway. Perhaps..."
As Fancy Pants scooted over in the walk-in shower and began to smile, Celestia could feel a matching smile rise to her own face.
Whoever that servant is, they're going to be getting a promotion.
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Heh.
And that's how things would go if my evil twin was writing this!
Like this one?
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Source.
What kind of words?
Like "I'm disappointed in you." or rather "To the mooon!"?
(Not sure which one would hurt her more.)
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Heh, I can only imagine the sheer devastation on Twi's face.
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Honestly I’m not sure why Twilight would think she could improve the looks of Celestia’s magical, flowing mane that resembles the likes of aurora borealis.
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Because everything can be improved!
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Little surprised you went with Fleur being Fancy Pants' daughter, but I won't condone the choice.
Also surprised that Celestia's hoof fit into Fancy Pants' wine glass. I know you said Fetlock, but that's behind the hoof and wouldn't reach deep enough to touch the wine (wine being often poured no more than a fourth of the glass's height).
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"Fetlock" I assume was referring to the feathering that leads to them being "unshorn", as opposed to the leg segment itself...
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Heh, yeah, just the feathering. ^.^
I feel like if I tried to get a date, things would go at least this bad... probably ten times worse.
and then there's:
and let's not forget the coup de fucking grace:
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1 - Replace 'glorified janitor' with a better-sounding title like 'custodian'.
2- "I have a room up on the west side. It's not much, but it's a really historic house." Move out of your mom's basement if possible, so that you can take a special someone home with you if you feel like it.
3- Develop a hobby that's worth being proud of -- one that doesn't consist of consuming entertainment products. Archery, painting, juggling ... hell, maybe just pick up a cheap Miata, take it to the autocross a few times, and say your hobby is being a race car driver. How cool is that? The most important key to becoming good at dating is to make yourself someone who people would want to date. Self-improvement is more important than having good answers to obvious questions.
This has been your unexpected and un-asked-for relationship advice for the day. Please forward any comment and complaints to Random Unwanted Advice, Inc.
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Actually pretty good advice. If I do say so myself.
that... actually went better than I feared, yet worse than I hoped
Twi's really in for it now, though.
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And I have no idea yet how that will play out!
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What if... Celestia will probably go full troll mode? Or even better, just tell Discord to have fun with her?
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Now that ... that is just diabolical!
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And you can go as nuts as you want to, because Discord
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You can have discord show up and act 'Normal' and he cane romantic side her into a good time. That would be something.
Followed by Luna marching in with the bat ponies!!!
Fleur being ANYTHING other than Fancy's wife makes me feel like this needs an AU tag, and this is DESPITE the fact that their exact relationship has not been defined in canon.
Heck, I even had to double check the transcript of Sweet and Elite just to be make sure there wasn't any lines about that.
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I have to tag it as AU because it differs from non-defined canon?
Sorry -- violating your headcanon doesn't make it AU.
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I know.
That's why I said it makes me FEEL like the AU tag is needed, not that it actually IS needed.
Probably should have been clearer on that.
Poor Celly!
This is a fun read, I look forward to it continuing.
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Oh, that's right, isn't it? I do need to continue this!