I always Wondered what was worse; a pissed pregnant mare or an angry vampire. To may dismay i have to deal with both.
My Name is Sunbeam and I hate my job.
Ok This my first Fan fic. and the first anything i've wrote in like 6 years. tread lightly and laugh much.
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If you don't want to scare off possible readers, I suggest fixing the grammar mistakes in the summary.
"Wonderer" isn't capitalized, but "I" always is. And the last sentence (which actually isn't really necessary)
should read
If you aren't really experienced in writing, it's easier to stick to the past tense.
Telling a story in present tense is something even good writers often have problems with. You should also re-read your story before submitting and check for grammar or spelling mistakes, or get a prereader to do this for you.
The idea itself is interesting, but the many mistakes are unfortunately glaring and distract from the actual story. If you need help with that or are looking for prereaders, look at this blog post.
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That was indeed my first fict. I'v written 3 more since. two have been published and the third is still being written. I've gotten better. Perhaps i should go back and polish this one up some?
1149924 Polishing up would be a good idea. Look how you can get some editors who can help you with your grammar in the link I gave you in the comment above.
Liar is spelled liar. Not Lier. Just a spelling mistake.
I also didn't get the story very much. I think it has potential if you work on the end.
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It's cool. it was a first shot. for now i'm working on something else. The prologue and first chapter will be up soon. Warning its a FoE side fict. i know those are all over the place, but i've been told by the few people who've seen it, that it's looking really good.
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Cool