Hello there everypony it's nice to be here, this is my first time since high school I've written anything again so please give me constructive feedback and tell me what needs improving on future works
Pinkie Pie wakes up too late in time to bake a cake for Sunny Daze's birthday, but finds a cake hot and made already? It's not until later that Pinkie finds out who helped her and makes sure to return the favor, by throwing this new friendly and helpful stranger a party of course, but not just a any party apparently, a cute-ceanera party!
Shout out to Flutterbrony539 for editing my story, you can find his profile page right here: http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Flutterbrony539
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Alright, two things. First, you'll need to send this back to your editor ASAP. Second, you could've done a better job explaining why Sweetie didn't take a slice of the cake. I assume it's because she's allergic to vanilla, but it just feels odd.
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Good point, I guess I've forgotten to add that in, thanks for pointing it out Gadgetphile.
Also my editor's been quite busy lately and I'll remind him to go back and fix those errors when he's available.