I did not realise this is not a 1 shot until I finished this chapter. *fist pump* This is great so far. and everyone that has read it seems to agree since it currently has no dislikes. I look forward to more.
7144694 I dont understand why it makes such a difference, Since the human has no name and no physical description he is basically an anon in all but words.
7144938 that's fine I actually prefer nameless humans in second person stories but I never understand why people get so angry over the idea of anon stories, some of the rage comments on other fits are mind blowing and it's all over a 4 letter word.
7144938 Exactly. By saying 'Anon' it feels like an external character. It should feel more like the reader instead, which is what 2nd person should be aiming for (in my opinion).
7146676 I'd honestly love to hear your explanation for this being foalcon, considering
A: There is no sex, kissing, or even romance of any kind in the posted chapter. B: Ember is easily twice Spike's age, if not more, and he's gotta be at least 10 or 11. C: If I considered her that young, I would have written "foalcon" in the trigger warnings.
But hey, you do you, downvote what you want, I guess.
7145014 Because it's a lazy terrible writing habit that sticks out like a sore thumb. Might as well just literally name the protagonist "Nameless". It takes a little more effort to just leave out naming the protagonist, but it usually turns out a lot better as the reader can much more easily visualize themselves in the story.
The only reason why "Anon" is considered an acceptable name is because of imageboards. You'll probably notice looking back that almost nobody named their main character "Anon" until around 2010 where greentext stories started popping up.
7146834 Yes, but they can't digest it well due to having the specialized digestive tract of a herbivore. The occasional bit of meat is fine for them, but it's not considered healthy. Of course, I'm sure you know that already, heh.
I see that I failed to describe that in the story though, and I thought I did, so thank you for bringing that to my attention, I'll be sure to edit that when I can
7146110 I'm actually laughing pretty hard at that, because originally, he had it as her dad that did that. And I went, "Nah, Seven, it was Ember!" because honestly, I don't know.
OK I had to favorite this story! It's a really good start! One of the biggest deciding factor was the Human NOT named "Anon"... honestly they got ANNOYING so quickly when you see 2nd Person MC x Canon Character the human or whoever they have as the MC is named "Anon" and I dislike seeing it almost on every human fic I read. I greatly prefer leaving the character's name out to help really immense the reader into the story and visualize themselves as them.
Also I greatly enjoy the new character Ember from the show (though I prefer Spike x Ember more, but I do like some Human x Dragon story as well and Ember is so Tsundere and I love Tsundere characters) and I hope she appears more often in the show. She's such a great character.
And the writing and grammar is well-point together as well, I haven't seen any errors yet, but I like this well-written story and I look forward to see future chapters of this story. I might make a one-shot with Ember and a Human, but more of a friendship story than a romance one.
Keep up the excellent writing dude! This is VirusChris signing off! Sayanora my nakama!
From what I have seen its more of a human x Ember fiction
Plus dragons grow slower than ponies or humans so by the fact that she is about twice Spikes hight she is at least twice his age and HE is close to the same age as Twilight
And the human is very obviously an adult
If your going to pull crap like your little post at least read the content before complaining
7146685 OK I'm done hating on the hater I like your story keep it up
7152772 The one that uses angel as a reference since the model used for him and the rabbit in EQ are exactly the same. Those are the sizes the animators themselves work with and therefore I take as canon.
I like this... so far. I like that Ember's not openly/overly/ridiculously in love with him at first sight so, you know, don't rush it. I think everyone can agree that they hate it when everything's too rushed.
“Well if they’re anything like the horses where I come from,” you speak with your mouth full, not caring at all how rude it is, “then they just can’t digest it as easily as they can vegetation.”
Not true, actually. Horses can easily digest meat, it's just that grass doesn't run. There's stories of horses grabbing meat straight off grills, and there's a video on YouTube of a horse eating a chick whole.
Most grazing animals are like that, actually. If they can get meat, they'll eat it happily. Deer have been known to eat squirrels and scavenge corpses in the wild.
Interesting, I'll be tracking this to see how it goes. I'm glad that you didn't do the whole anon thing with the 2nd person perspective.
Great job so far, I can't wait to see what happens next. :)
I did not realise this is not a 1 shot until I finished this chapter. *fist pump* This is great so far. and everyone that has read it seems to agree since it currently has no dislikes.
I look forward to more.
7144694 I dont understand why it makes such a difference, Since the human has no name and no physical description he is basically an anon in all but words.
7144935 For me, it's just the thought of the character saying "anon". It doesn't feel as personal if they do, which is why I wrote it this way.
I do love a good tsundere story. Wonder when the first dislike will appear. Prolly by some new hard core spike and ember shipper. :/
Oh man I was laughing my ass off at the image of Garble in a Tutu. that was a good bit of comedy there.
7144938 that's fine I actually prefer nameless humans in second person stories but I never understand why people get so angry over the idea of anon stories, some of the rage comments on other fits are mind blowing and it's all over a 4 letter word.
Pretty good
Incredible first chapter. Keep up the awesome work
Loved it!
I am going to be faving this.
Really Good First Chapter Can't Wait For More
They ate beef.
Beef comes from cows.
Cows are sapient.
Murder.
Murder everywhere.
That chapter title. Going for a Friends theme? You nerd.
(nice featured, btw)
7145785 Maybe I am going for a Friends theme, bitch
I really don't see the difference between sleeping in a stone bed or in the floor.
7145893 Maybe the stone bed has a stone pillow?
It's awesome
Good story when is the next chapter is out
I love it so far, but...
Wasn't that Spike's decree? Before he handed over the scepter?
7144938 Exactly. By saying 'Anon' it feels like an external character. It should feel more like the reader instead, which is what 2nd person should be aiming for (in my opinion).
7145898 With stone blankets?
How cooked exactly? Cause I'd rather not be eating a fried boot.
Then remind me later to teach you of a little concept called "Friends With Benefits."
7146110 Went back and watched, and you're right. I'll go ahead and edit that spot, thanks!
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7145898 and a stone blanket, maibe?
7146559 Somehow we've made this sound worse than the floor
More foalcon... downvoted.
7146676 I'd honestly love to hear your explanation for this being foalcon, considering
A: There is no sex, kissing, or even romance of any kind in the posted chapter.
B: Ember is easily twice Spike's age, if not more, and he's gotta be at least 10 or 11.
C: If I considered her that young, I would have written "foalcon" in the trigger warnings.
But hey, you do you, downvote what you want, I guess.
7145014
Because it's a lazy terrible writing habit that sticks out like a sore thumb. Might as well just literally name the protagonist "Nameless". It takes a little more effort to just leave out naming the protagonist, but it usually turns out a lot better as the reader can much more easily visualize themselves in the story.
The only reason why "Anon" is considered an acceptable name is because of imageboards. You'll probably notice looking back that almost nobody named their main character "Anon" until around 2010 where greentext stories started popping up.
Horeses, and most herbivores, can and do eat meat on occasion.
7146834 Yes, but they can't digest it well due to having the specialized digestive tract of a herbivore. The occasional bit of meat is fine for them, but it's not considered healthy. Of course, I'm sure you know that already, heh.
I see that I failed to describe that in the story though, and I thought I did, so thank you for bringing that to my attention, I'll be sure to edit that when I can
7146676
7146685
Spike's age kind of just depends on how old you think Twilight and them are. It varies from person to person, but either way, it can't be foalcon.
Also, cool story brah.
7145606
the best kind of murder.
tasty tasty murder.
7146685 Well personally I'd like to think she's sweet 16 or 18.
7147260 Your profile pic is unusually fitting,
7146110 I'm actually laughing pretty hard at that, because originally, he had it as her dad that did that. And I went, "Nah, Seven, it was Ember!" because honestly, I don't know.
I know what I'm doing, I swear!
7145606
OK I had to favorite this story! It's a really good start! One of the biggest deciding factor was the Human NOT named "Anon"... honestly they got ANNOYING so quickly when you see 2nd Person MC x Canon Character the human or whoever they have as the MC is named "Anon" and I dislike seeing it almost on every human fic I read. I greatly prefer leaving the character's name out to help really immense the reader into the story and visualize themselves as them.
Also I greatly enjoy the new character Ember from the show (though I prefer Spike x Ember more, but I do like some Human x Dragon story as well and Ember is so Tsundere and I love Tsundere characters) and I hope she appears more often in the show. She's such a great character.
And the writing and grammar is well-point together as well, I haven't seen any errors yet, but I like this well-written story and I look forward to see future chapters of this story. I might make a one-shot with Ember and a Human, but more of a friendship story than a romance one.
Keep up the excellent writing dude! This is VirusChris signing off! Sayanora my nakama!
7146427
Whelp.... Let the shipping train begin!
Great story so far, favoured it
7145606 Ahhh the circle of murder in Equus!
7147269 And i see you on a ember fic. Then again I suppose you have to be, I ordered the featured box filled with this stuff.
Just to spite you.
7146676
From what I have seen its more of a human x Ember fiction
Plus dragons grow slower than ponies or humans so by the fact that she is about twice Spikes hight she is at least twice his age and HE is close to the same age as Twilight
And the human is very obviously an adult
If your going to pull crap like your little post at least read the content before complaining
7146685
OK I'm done hating on the hater I like your story keep it up
"Just barely a head taller than yourself."
Damn I'm a short bastard then. Comparing her height to the ponies she's prob around 5' 3'' to 5' 5''
Just nitpicking. Fun read so far, cant wait for more.
7152658
What kind of equations did you use?
The. Hot monkey dick or the pony pole equation?
7152772 The one that uses angel as a reference since the model used for him and the rabbit in EQ are exactly the same. Those are the sizes the animators themselves work with and therefore I take as canon.
I like this... so far. I like that Ember's not openly/overly/ridiculously in love with him at first sight so, you know, don't rush it. I think everyone can agree that they hate it when everything's too rushed.
Not true, actually. Horses can easily digest meat, it's just that grass doesn't run. There's stories of horses grabbing meat straight off grills, and there's a video on YouTube of a horse eating a chick whole.
Most grazing animals are like that, actually. If they can get meat, they'll eat it happily. Deer have been known to eat squirrels and scavenge corpses in the wild.