Reach for the stars and don't let anybody bring you down because you will just rise again. You should never fear anybody for there is always someone who loves you... no matter where or who you are....
Little Skylight Dash has to find out what her true destiny is. How will she overcome her worst fears of bullying? Her fears become reality. And what of her princess body? Is she or isn't she a princess? This is her journey to find her destiny.
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You know, this wasn't bad for a first fic. I would suggest that you continue reading other successful fic writers on the site to figure out how they became so good at it. I bet you have lots of great stories to tell, so good luck writing in the future!
Make sure you work on your grammar and characterization going forward. Those two things can always be made to improve, in my experience.
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Thanks its not 100% done yet so I hope it will get better
Mega short chapters (60 words!!)? Check.
Hand drawn alicorn OC? Check.
Tons of grammar mistakes? Check.
Ignorance of canon? Check.
Pacing all over the map? Check.
Welcome to the site, and good luck!!
7038615
Uh thanks I think.
Sorry to anyone who thinks this chapter is short.
7039176 It's 60 words, that's not a chapter. It's literally three sentences. For a first fic there is some good stuff going on here, but you need to flesh out your ideas more, you can't just have your chapters be:
I'm sad
Sorry you're sad.
End chapter.
Ok, I don't mean to sound cruel here, but is english your first language? It sounds like you can barely string a sentence together.
7040218
Well thanks for the feedback but I think I can string a sentence. And yes English is my first language as I LIVE IN ENGLAND
7040065
Well I'm trying isn't that all that matters right now
7042373 yes trying is important, and you should keep writing, but if you're trying that means you want to get better and one thing you can woek on is longer chapters with more fleshed out ideas.
7042461
Thanks for the pointers
Ummmmmm...
I don't know how to feel about this story
7043710
Its not finished yet and there will be a SoarinDash eventually