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Sweet mother Celestia in a hand basket! This is some of the best clop I've had the fortune to read and I'm loving every minute of it! It saddens me that it's ending so soon... I need more of Eric and Marble and just lots of snuggling and kissing and the sexing!

Exceptionally well done. A minute number of spelling/grammar errors throughout. Interesting word choices, and creative combinations.

I anxiously look forward to the final chapter. Do forgive me if my spelling and grammar are inaccurate, as I have not studied much German.

Ich möchte, dass meine Marmor. Jetzt.

Oh, and lastly,

*clears throat and inhales deeply*

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MMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOORRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!

-Ru

Hot as hell itself. Eric and Marble certainly are coming into an exciting stage of their relationship.

Thanks for this chapter. It's great to see Marble get more sexually confident.

10/10 DCS, approved for its sauciness and the hilarious paragraphs I read.

He just hoped that Equestrian pipes were tested to handle a human male’s natural alfredo sauce.

hahaha! Awesome work man, awesome work on this!

One more chapter remains, y'all!

Till the story ends! NUUUUUUUUUUUU

I loved the chapter, by the by, good damn work on it!
Heheheeh

That was technically correct.

neither Maud nor Limestone had told her anything about something like this.

Okay Maud I understand with her travelling all the time, but Limestone? There's a story there

*HEAVY PETTING INTENSIFIES*
Next is probably rubbing in hot dogging and/or sumata style.
Slowly but surely we are closing in on the actual pony ride.

Please don't let this end next chapter! This is too good, I want moreeeeee!!!

Wait just one more chapter, that's cutting things off pretty short isn't it? They haven't even really started a relationship, he hasn't even taken her out on ONE date since this whole thing started as they were keeping it secret. So we'll never see things like how the family deals with their youngest in a full on relationship, I mean the father suspects at least. How will the sisters take it and then how they all get along now that he's just not a live in but also Marble's boyfriend? What will he do when his studies are over for instance? I just hate it when these types of stories end JUST when things start between a couple.

7168662 This was only meant to be a sweet little short story and not a FULL on massive-chapter work, unfortunately. HOWEVER, that doesn't mean that the final chapter won't be monolithic in size to account for all the good stuff.

Don't you worry, I'll be taking care of everything that needs to be shown

“Boo!” Marble cutely blurted as she threw himself upon the recently-returned Eric.[/q

herself

Marble is getting bolder (Heh, boulder). Wonder what's gonna happen next time?

I actually prefer Maud.

One one chapter left? Aww... But we need to see at least
1) her going with Eric to his college,
2) her having at least one more panic attack (even though I feel a little cruel for saying that, but I feel her reticence issues would be a bit too easily resolved, otherwise)
(and if I had my way, a proper deflowering.)

That can't all fit in one chapter!?

Yeah yeah, I know it is rather presumptuous for a reader like me to make a list of requests like this. Especially that last one. Please forgive my rudeness. It's just that this story has still so much potential in my head, and I love this story so much I would be really sad to see it end without exploring all it's potential.

Huh. At this point I've noticed something I didn't think of until now.
Flammen, do you have a big tits/titfucking fetish? It seems to be a common thing among your stories.
...Not that I'm complaining.
Also, how awkward would it be for Marble to leave her room in her 'condition' and run into Limestone in the hallway, who was just getting a drink before bed?

7169012 Oh that would be a scene to remember! I totally need that to happen before the story ends too!

12/10, someone should give this man an award!

7169012 Iiiiiiish? maybe? Borderline I'd say. Thinking through, I did a scene for MBF,L, Night Training (required for a competition), GD&CP, umm... and I think that's all. Definitely not as common as a few other acts considering it's relative commonality but I squeeze one in whenever it's viable.

His sperms are wondering where the hell they are!

Sweet dude, although I'm still wondering if the sisters haven't started peeking with all the damn noise they've been making, plus that one 'anything' comment Maud threw at him in the first chapter.

Okay, there's one thing that's been heavily confusing me about this fic.

Where's the line of anthro?

You say "hands" and "tits" and "arms" and then you say "hooves". How much pony and how much human is there? Use this scale

7171750 Easier way; as you can tell by the cover art, that's how the faces look. They have essentially the same bodies covered in a coat and their feet end in hooves. If you want a picture example, check out my profile page and scroll down until you find my drawn OC. That's exactly the interpretation

7172915 Coulda said 3, but okay. Thanks! XD

7172933 Number 3 looks like they have horse legs, which they don't, they just end in hooves lol. The distribution was too discrete

whens the next chapter?! i need to read it!!!!

Ya know... the clop is awesome, but really what sells this story to me is just how utterly a-fucking-dorable Marble is. Dear god she has to be the cutest fucking character I've ever seen. well done Flame.

7192919 Haha I'm SUPER glad you feel that was, as that was the plan! Thank you!

If I may ask, what part of her character sealed it for you?

7192998 One of the things that I liked about Marble since she first appeared in the show was her lil "mmhm" and how shy she was. You pretty much nailed her attitude around other's pretty well from the small amount of face time she's had.

Seems he made a landslide all over marble....

I'll just show myself out now T.T

7192998
When is the next chapter can't wait it'll be great

welp, thanks. that simultaneously made happy at how cute marble is, but very sad, because she reminds me of my ex. she even does the thing where she hides when you compliment her

Such an amazing story!!! I wish you could make it even longer there's so much more that can go with it and the story makes me sooo happy! I literally get goosebumps reading it! Ughhh I'm so attached to these characters!

7206519 That means I must be doing something right! Haha I'm glad you're enjoying yourself thus far, and yeah, this was only meant to be a short story before I move onto larger projects

7206953 you're doing something right!! Your story's are amazing.... And the bigger projects are the three huge story's called "main" right?.. I tried to get into them and nothing hooks me like this one does :0 I wish it could be longer Ughhh I've already had one fic that did that to me and it had me in tears for weeks.... I get so attached to the characters and when the fic ends..... It's horrible... The pain :0 the pain!!! You have no idea how much Ima miss Eric and marble after this... Oh btw when's the next chapter..... The... The last chapter...

7206970 Yeah that's them, though only one is clop-centric (My Best Friend, Luna) which is pretty much a story with clop written throughout. If you are looking for more like, shameless clop, I do have a small humanized Spike x _____ series in my story list, as well as a few other misc. oneshots. And thank you, heh, I'm always happy when someone enjoys my work.

And well, you can bet the last chapter will be easily over 10k words to cover all the stuff I want to before the ending, and I'm hoping to get around to it by this weekend after I finish a commission.

7207002 I love you 0.0 Ughhh I can't wait... But I don't want this one in particular to end ughhhh... I'm so attached to the characters.. But I am reading (and clopping) to your pinkie and spike story... But I can't get this one out of my mindddddddd its soooo good!!! ;0 I hope this one has tons of amazingness... Of course it will it's you were talking about none other than one of the best fic writers out there!! I can't wait... Seriously... I love how Romantic you've written this one so far.. It's adorable and cute and.... And..... PLEASE DONT LET IT END! I suppose it has to though...... I think I'm your biggest fan.. Seriously... You brought me to tears..... Sooooo good

7207029 Romance writing (and clop) is pretty damn fun, I love writing it so I'm happy when others get into it as well haha. Again, worry not, the final chapter will be worth everyone's while

7207097 yayyyy!!!! I love marble and Eric ^_^

more plz

7232159 couldn't agree more 0.0 can't FUCKING wait

7232159 7233304
Won't be too much longer

7234124 yea

Hey, you still alive in there?

7234124
*2... weeks.... laterrrrr*

Crickets: nah bro, we got better shit to do *walk off*

Damn Marble is so adorable.

Marble opened her eyes and donned a much more impish complexion, as Eric had just activated her trap card.

Marble:
"Fool, now you are stuck, and I summon to the field the fabled Blue Eyes White Dragon!"
Eric:
NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Marble opened her eyes and donned a much more impish complexion, as Eric had just activated her trap card. i-i don't even know what to say *sigh* god dammed references

Eric had just activated her trap card.
"You've activated my trap card!"
"You've activated your asshole! Your dead!"
Anyone get that reference or no?

i enjoyed this chapter, good stuff :D

He just hoped that Equestrian pipes were tested to handle a human male’s natural alfredo sauce.

That is TOO funny! You have a natural turn of phrase that is simply hilarious!

Well! Things are definitely heating up between these two, and I like how Eric is more concerned with her pleasure than his own. "A gentleman always makes the lady cum first."

Eh. Has it been more or less two and a half weeks? Why has not anyone noticed the '' noise '' or do they just not care? Would be fun with more stoic flirtation of the maud =) well eric travels from the farm to canterlot why does not maud do the same? so many questions...

anyway, Good story =)