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Badass goth indeed. Horns and demon wings and all.
Where you planning on this from the start or was it more of a spur of the moment thing?
Twas a decent chapter but I was a little disapointed with the AJ and Rarity section.
760170 i was planning it since i decided to add the drug, and i am too...i just ran out of stuff to write
That A/N could have gone at the bottom of the chapter. Kind of ruined the effect of the discovery with it up at the top. It made me expect a transformation with at least wings.
760193 eh, sorry but it's an author's note :P
760267 That could have easily and effectively gone at the bottom of the chapter. :P
760342 when i make an author's note I put it at the top because it takes care of things i want people to know before reading, i guess i forgot to put the parts that gave away story elements in a comment...oh well
don't be so hard on yourself, you'll just make it up to us with the next chapter
demonlight sparkle, i like it!
760760 you're right, it has absolutely no effect on my writing- and for the record I'm only using the two man squad to do a bit of character-personality-fighting style-relationship building. the two man squad stuff is in fact ending now, they weren't by themselves. they were helping others and most of the time had advantages. the dragon thing is just an experiment right now, trying to see if I can work it in right with the story. as for the overpowered ninja shit, it really isn't. compared to normal people yeah it's overpowered, but against their enemies not really. as for going at them with CQC, you do realize that sometimes you really do just have to get up close and beat them down. guns only work so well, I'm not going for realism. it is anime-esq I won't deny it, but it's all coming from my mind and the mids of people making good suggestions.
760848 have to keep the story interesting. it's your opinion and i respect that. but instead of condemning the story right away read on a bit as I update and see how I go with it. honestly I don't know for sure, nothing with my stories is really definite
too be honest i was expecting the Demons Blood to do some sort of boost but damn did Twi get the harsh end of that one when it mixes
Heck why does this always happen I read other peoples fics and I get tons of ideas go through my head, I've been thinking of possible combat scenarios, if you want the ideas You can gladly have them and use them as you see fit
hey i like the dragon idea but merely as they could be scouts or help with some support missions but other than that don't mention them too much. i like the anime feel to this honestly (maybe cuz i watch lots of anime) anyway keep doing what you do and maybe try to make the chapters a bit longer.
-nikent
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You could use griffons as previously escaped tatarus creatures, or as allies against them...
This is an awesome story!
I think I'd like to grab my dads L115A3 and my three combay knives now, cause that seems like my kind of place.
761150 send em in PMs, head on over to crimson dawn and suggest things there since that one is practically written by you guys
761162 the only time I think the dragons are going to be present are in larger scale battles and Onyx will have a place at the manor
761213 well they were a civilized peoples in the show so I don't that that particularly fits them, I plan on doing a scene like the gilda episode...not sure if she's going to join the team or not but the idea gives me an epic ass cover art idea- too bad i'm no good at drawing
762147 I'd find a sniper and grab one of my dad's Katana.
762617 About right. L115A3 AWSM(yes that is the Acronym, Arctic Warfare Super Magnum.) Sniper rifle, chambered for .338 Lapua Magnum. It's a smile from a mile .
As for the combat knives, well my dad taught me how to fight with knives, otherwise a cool sword would be a must.
Followup the L115A3 with an MP7 and my dad's custom 2-round burst M1911 and I'd be at the mane 6's side ina heartbeat.
762661 well i have received no such training in reality, but I tend to learn from what I see so I can load and fire most guns without ever doing so before and I can use a variety of blades effectively, or at least more effective than another with no training as well. as for me choosing a sniper rifle, it fits me. I have good accuracy and quick reflexes, plus I like to be a bit away from the front lines and be able to take on the role of support and attacker simultaneously
762731 I pull more along the lines of Fluttershy's assassin/assault.
Both an MP7 and my dads custom 1911 can be fitted with suppresors. His L115A3 obviously cannot, but at 800 metres+ from your enemy you don't really have much to worry about.
I would pull long range support, then swap to the MP7 and 1911 for close quarters.
And what makes this even better, is that next year I'll be 21, and after doing some extra work and a fex specialized classes I'll be allowed own things such as the custon 1911(because my dad's military is why he can posses a burst fire wepon without legal crap involved.)
ERROR, CRITICAL LOGIC FAILURE
I'm done. This story is going to give me a migraine with how sloppily-written it is.
We have plotholes visible from the moon, atrocious grammar, and characters so OP that they might as well be Sues.
Also, you fail in understanding of basic winged humanoid body structure and lack any understanding of how large jetpacks are.
You fail. Do not pass Go. Do not collect any positive ratings. Not from me at least.
Try again, and this time, get a pre-reader.