well guys tell me what you think, did I balance the action and fluff right? the action will make the gore tag proud when the real fighting starts but this is just a taste. also, what do you guys think of Casual Celestia?

I like it. The fighting could be a bit more and drawn out but its okay. I love the fluff. All and all. Moustache for you. And a thumbs up!

Ah, well that fight was a definite improvment over last. Over all acceptable but not examplary. I'd suggest opening up more sentences with "-ing" words, it just provides a stronger sense of the action happening. That said you should allways vary sentence structure so throw in a few other types of sentence openers as well.
I liked the casusal way they all handled there fights 'I really wouldn't fuck with me right now.' and 'Shoot, sorry 'bout that...was aimin' fer the wall.' had me chuckling.

740493 good, that's what it's there for

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Oh well.

Still a great game!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bo85IB1_frA

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u2Tm1m7uEVs

Love the new chapter!

Twi is a badass, I like where this story is going

742179 I know, I was originally going to try for either TwiDash or TwiShy, but a humanized high school story? strawberry panic would not get out of my mind so I just had to pair her with Tia. therefore I didn't want to leave Luna alone so eventually she's going with flutters. dash could go with aj, but I don't see rarity and pinkie. I'm going to try and go about the pairings in a new way, pretty much not making it the focus of the story- while it was mostly the focus of the prologue

PinkieDash?
acsu.buffalo.edu/~kevinsko/fuck-that-shit.jpg

My own petty issues aside, I'm enjoying this.

Seriously, you have issues with grammar.

Otherwise, this story is a somewhat interesting read, plotholes and jarring scene transitions aside...