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Hm, I wonder if my mentioning of the Changelings will have any significance?
ahhh my god!!!!!!!!
plus add a side story of twilights parents with the changelings
The mentioning of the changelings totally won't have anything to do with the story. Definitely not. Anyway, loving the story so far. Looking forward to the next chapter.
798030 Why do all the good action authors feel the need to place spoilers like this one?
798348 I'm actually not spoiling anything. I don't know if it will or not. it could just be a little "Yeah changelings and stuff" or it could be a major story twist. I put it there to see what you guys think of it
798423 ...Oh. Still wonder why they do it though...
good ol family reunion
798480 to make you wonder how they're going to pull it off and make you want to see the chapter that won't come out for three years even more
I'm sorry, but why does this story feel like there's no base line for this story?
800308 because it changes constantly. *shrugs* i write on the spot
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Okay I apologize it's just i liked the idea of a school for training and fighting demons, then the half demon thing showed up. I was interested in that idea as well. Then I realized by the time they were the "Nightstalkers" that you were just throwing things out there. (I guess I'm just developing a critic side after reading this post. )
800400 well when an idea starts to go stale, I.E. the high school thing, I throw a random cool plot twist. the Nightstalkers idea came during a big brainstorming session me and s00perguy had.
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A valid point it just feels like it's moving to fast while reading after a long day. Although in future story's I urge you to think it through more.
800453 eh that's a bit impossible. my writing style makes my story susceptible to change easily. so the readers get to have some say in what happens. also, like I said, if I start to get bored writing one plot point I'll mix it up a bit to add to the story
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Very true ,but some times it can be a subtle change like when Gilda joined could have added a new array of depth. It also helps to be a bet more descriptive when working on certain parts.It adds for longer chapters and more typing, but it yields results If you look at some of the other great works on this site. One story that would be good to look at as an example would be, - http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2354/Equestria%3A-Total-War or the more romantic side - http://www.fimfiction.net/story/2060/Two%27s-Company%2C-Three%27s-a-Crowd. They are amazing pieces of work that have a long standing and are still on the go. I'll admit the last one had gotten quite cliche near the end.
800541 ah two's company three's a crowd. that created my OctyScratch love. remember, I write on the spot. I plan the basic story and go with it based on whatever I thought up that night/morning and the feedback i've been getting. and if you're going to tell me to be more descriptive you're going to have to be specific.
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Very well the part where they had originally turned into Nightstalkers felt a little uneasy and with a lack of the more finer details of the appearances such as the way you described that they were humanoid wolfs you could have done each of the main characters step by step such as this "Dash's new katanas were slide through her hand in a sicking fashion, attaching to her wrist.She frantically tried to maintain a grip them to stop the transformation they slowly sunk into her skin.As she tried to gab the blade she ended up cutting her hand when she took a look at the wound she noticed that her hands were growing in size and were developing claws.She then noticed that she had started growing hair on the back of her hand and steadily along her arm. She then stole a look at her legs, and was horrified when she saw that her shins were bending backwards and forming joints. She then noticed to feel the length of her mouth and nose growing out a few inches and she had began to develop fangs. She then notice that (Next character of you choice) had under gone the same change." I also noticed in your righting writing style you use the next step of your story as a separate point of view of another character, you could do the same thing in the placement of they're weapons. Or to save time and keep it simple you could have the separate steps through separate characters. Just describe the way you see it in your head.
I also became aware that you don' really write in some of the other main characters as often as other writers would.Such as when they were discussing the plan on how to help the guards in they're efforts to save the towns you could have had all of they're opinions on the matter. Involve them more, and develop character.
If you ever need more help with pre-reading I'd be happy to help although like you said your writing style lets you keep the readers involved ,but those are just little details that some of the wanna be critics look at when they read these fics. But I've wasted enough of your time and I'm sure some of the other readers are getting aggravated with me for wasting your time when you could be writing for them, I know I am.
800873 now, you're taking me for a professional writer that takes time and goes over everything he writes. I literally sit down and pump out the chapters, or chapters, and upload them. I have minimal mistakes so I don't need to worry much about looking it over and people like the story. as for the description, i've always had trouble getting into the finer details. I actually try to think this stuff out...but mby the time i sit down to write it's gone. besides, sometimes it just flows for me and adding a lengthy description would mess me up. as for prereading and stuff, I've tried before and unless it's a collaboration fic it doesn't work because of how sporadic my updates are when I'm not working on a new fic and how fast I pump them out in that case. besides, I upload as soon as i finish the chapter
why is this called chapter 20? did you miss chapter 19? or is this just a mistake?
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Okay then I was only trying to help and I can under stand where your coming from on that matter and I want to apologize I was really tired when talking with you on the matter and wish you the best of luck.
801409 WUPS thanks a lot, forgot to publish 19
801927 Octy's the blacksmith, Vinyls the assistant : P, as for Vinyl's blade, if I make her a kinda main character there'd be too many to keep up with... she's just a side character- combat wise. Octy forges the weapons and then Vinyl uses her wub cannon to awesomeify it.
kidding, but Vinyl does take the bare forged weapons and add details and designs and stuff. well in the big scale battles notice it's mostly CQC. i do that intentionally. the only ones really shooting are the snipers in the bigger battles, and they're either led by fire or on a strict 'fire only when shot is clear' policy. that berserk thing wouldn't work here. that would make them little better than the monsters they fight and I've made it clear that's the last thing they want to do. as for Octy, I'm alays seeing her as an assassin from AC and I can't get that out of my head, but I can meld the two together to make something like hidden blades on cables to act something like the blades of chaos from GoW
802832 lol I never thought about that. not as dynamic but kinda similar, the blades are static and aren't just her bones and stuff, the reaver gauntlets melded with her and took on a bone-like texture. same with all the others. they've just gotten more blades since that happened, up the arms a bit.
798480 What it is is treading the waters. If I mention Diamond dogs and no one cares, then Diamond dogs aren't important. But if I said manticore and everyones like "manticore awesome!' then it shows up
am i the only one who gets a weird vibe about the whole thing that twilight's parents, who were presumed dead, came from THE FREAKING CHANGELINGS?!? it just seems like a trap to me
852447 eeeeeyup
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Well look at the Timber Wolves. They are recognized as friendly and helpful. They even talk. So it could be possible that the changelings are friendly too. Also her eye sees through illusions and a lot depictions of changelings has them use natural illusion magic.