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Yeah twilight got hurt, but we can't have her be too overpowered now can we? the eye is going to be explained further don't worry. at least she wasn't fatally wounded eh? and what did you guys think of the Hunter squad's input? I was going to explain the mags thing but I won't get the chance, basically what I'm going for is that money wouldn't be very useful when you're out on the field so the snipers would bet mags. their money would go into replacing lost ammunition no? if they win more ammunition then that's more money they can spend on other things like better rations or something like that. was that battley enough for ya?
744170
I enjoyed the Hunter squad input during the fight. It gave the scene a bit of humor to compliment the actual battle that was taking place. I am thoroughly satisfied with the battle scene. Also, I like how you prevented Twilight from being overpowered.
this is the most bad ass fanfic i have ever read so far its just so awsome!
744262 you like how I implemented the Manticores? I was going for something that really didn't need much explaining, I already have hellish moinsters in my Crimson series and I didn't want to just copy paste, so I just modified something from the show and made it more hellish.
744170 we can to have her overpowered twilight's awesome granted overpowered people get hurt in combat to it just luck sometimes
744905
Yeah, the implication of creatures already present but not referred to was quite clever. And to be honest, a manticore in a bad mood wouldn't require too much to be considered "hellish" by some standards.
great battle scene Dark! it was easy to visualize all the fighting. was a little sad that crazy pinkie wasn't fighting in this chapter but we can hope right
great job! don't stop now!
745020 well in this they're not quite as cartooney, first of all they've got the thick chest bones. I said vaguely feline because I don't really like the 'bumbling lion' look it has in the show so think more like a Liger, as for the tail it is, of course, more like an actual scorpion. as for the claws they're not quite normal for a cat claw, more like Talons in my mind. all of that together makes them much freakier
745101 I'm going to do a chapter for each of the first missions, so five in total. some may be short while some may be large, none will be quite this long though- as the actual mission part starts about a page and a half in
Now that was a good fight scene. In particular I enjoyed the sardonic comments from the Hunters one through five. Also of interest was the almost RPG like nature of the way they took on missions.
In relation to last chapter (that I didn't review at the time) I have to point out that not one of the students objected to basically being told the just got conscripted into fighting demons. Oh and why is AJ using a double barrel? What advantage would it have over a regular pump action?
Now that was an awesome set of fights and truly it would be impossible for anyone not to get hurt in a situation like that, as much as I like to Twilight and the others kick ass it feels more real and makes them appear more Human to get hurt, the description of the fights flowed a lot better than the previous chapters and it's good to see each character's fighting styles come into play aswell.
The Sniper squads comments that punctuated the fight where hilarious, betting Mags hmmm either that means ammo or something else that is more suited to the story that's got me interested as to what that it means
okay Twilight is damn skilled in glyphs if she came up with a glyph that on the spot that both healed and removed poison even if it was a high magic drain that's pretty impressive
And now I'm worried about what Shining Armor said about putting a drug in the food, that wording does not leave a good image in my head
744662 you, sir, have clearly not read Crimson Night... or Crimson Dawn, for that matter...
Unless there was a large amount of awesome i missed? I haven't actually read this... but i do have it on my reading schedule for tonight, so don't worry, we shall see...
*yoink*
“Shy Assassins...”
Pony versions of:
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or maybe not.
744170
I enjoyed the hunter squad loads!
“Fuck you five”
"She kicked it to roll it over and gave it a good look, it's skull was shattered now and only one eye was undamaged. But that one eye glared at her as it gave her a menacing, but weak, growl. Twilight spit to the side and" CURB STOMP!
746823 crimson...whatnow? ive actually never heard of those before
747131 crimson Night and Crimson Dawn, in that order. Read them. They're in Darks library, just make sure you turn on mature content. They are sooooo awesome.
745795 AJ is a farm girl...I just thought I'd keep that in mind...country folk tend to use double barrels y'know?
745916 ah you're the first to comment on that little comment, that'll come into play after the missions. but keep an eye out. as for the Glyphs, that's her research. she literally wrote one or two of the dictionaries on them.
746823 I enjoy writing this more than the crimson series, more hilarity and better action
746857 no idea what that is, but that'll come into play later if i keep this track
747131 i do have 16 other fics under my belt...
747427 i gotta read them fore sure
747367 ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
747666Damn right ye do! Hop to it, scout! I finished it in three days at a decent pace of three nights. So expect it to take about that long.
Speaking of, Dark? Which chapter of CD will you be using my fight scene in? Just curious.
742475 actually, I never got the impression that the pairings were any more than a convenient plot element, you know, something to write about in the cool down period between the fights and such, with the exclusion of your actual shipping focused fics, TNSoL for example, and when you did that, it was indeed the focus.,
As it is, however, as I see it, the relationships are just more icing on an already quite fantastic cake.
write this last night while reading up to this point. i shall read the spike and emerald one tonight.
Bahahahahahahahaha! Oh god. I was I tears! God, that was exactly what I expected of Dash! God, I always have her pegged as the instigator of... Well anything, so this bit just clicked with me, period. God, that was friggin hilarious! Never had that happen to me, I can tell ya that much!
God, once more you've got the personality for everyone done perfectly, yet with enough originality to make it all your own. Yes Fluttershy is quiet, but with her you took the "walk softly, carry a big stick" (damn, does she ever carry a big stick) approach, which meshes PERFECTLY with her personality. God I love 50. Cal...
Anyway, off the subject of Fluttershy with a 50 before I start drooling.
I love that Twilight literally wrote the book on glyphs... Just kinda made me snigger.
Heh, you really like your squads, don't you? Stick with what you know, definitely, and you know squads. Speaking of, best fan art ever for it.
When I saw the bit about armor, I was like "did he use it? Oh god, did he use it? No? Damn. Well at least he used the shields bit... And realized I was kinda going for mass effect armor..."
And then... Waitaminit... Modular Rifle? My blade design became a gun? EPIC ADAPTATION! *cheer* I'm sorry, I just get a kick out of noticing any influence I may have had on a story, so knowing that I introduced you to the modular idea gave me a little ego boost. I mean really, that was a great harnessing of the idea In a new form. I'd even go so far as to say it's different enough to be all your own, except for the fact the concept is mine... :P I just love seeing my ideas written out by people better suited for them. Just don't forget to pass a little credit on to me! Esp. With the upcoming Dawn fight scene, whenever you plan on doing that.
I can definitely tell that you had a lot of fun with this, especially in the dialogue between the sniper team. Brilliant. And I have a similar question to one already asked. I mean, I know they could have been talking about bullet magazines, but somehow I think the military would provide those, so it's equally possible it was some other kind of magazine. Mind clearing that up? Thanks.
Oh, and I simply must touch on this. Eyeglass platoon? In Edinspur? Fo' real? Nice sly reference to Gemstones and Eyeglasses... I do so love inter-story connections... Actually, I'm kind of hoping you make some kind of connection to Crimson Night or Crimson Dawn... Just because they kind of play out similarly, except here it's not a TwiLuna (... My iPod autocorrected that word... Yet I've never typed it on my iPod... I love you Apple) just a TwiLestia, but beyond that, the differences, beyond the actual story, are shockingly few. Their weaponry is finally out of the dark ages, somewhat, though you've held onto that, whic I'm personally happy for, since I've been having brutal battles with these characters in my head for the past tree days, and they wouldn't be the same without them, considering my hard-on for large weaponry (yes I really have a thing for guns and swords) which probably explains why thinking about Fluttershy with a .50 cal is getting me somewhat hot and bothered... And then even the pairings are similar to other stories, though the TwiLestia and what I see coming up as a Fluttershy/Luna pairing, I have definitely seen before, in one of your abandoned fics, Celestial Connections. Kinda wondering if that was actually a purposeful nod, but I haven't read your whole library yet, so I don't honestly know...
You know what? This has inspired me. Imma go design a few guns, PM me at your earliest convenience, Dark, because I've definitely got me an upgrade for a certain pink haired Valkerie that will REALLY let her live up to the name of the warrior goddess you've named her after... *shudders with joy* as well as a few firearm upgrades for the rest, though I'll need to hear from you which people you want new weapons for and when. But I'll give you a hint as to my design for the new sniper rifle: butterfly kisses.
That is all.