Button is a normal Stallion who enjoys only two things: gaming and reading. When he attempts to broaden his Collection, he stumbles into an Adventure even he couldn't ever imagine
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Its pretty good, but there are far to many of the commas there. You might want to fix that, they're kind of annoying.
Hee hee.... Button Mash.
All in all, it was a pretty good first attempt. Even if the quotations are a little wonky. I won't deny it, but the chapter itself runs pretty fast and I felt like I was skimming at best. Even though I read it normally. We all start somewhere and my own first attempt at writing years ago was a truly horrific peice. It even had to be locked away in the SCP facilities.
Secure
Contain
Protect...
ZEE AWAAY!
I can see where it's going, and I won't thumb-down you, but you might want to find an editor-someone who can at least clean it up. I understand that English is not your primary language, but finding someone to help you make sure it makes sense in English will go a far way.
I expect more and go to the proofreader group.
Changelog: edited some Parts here and there, but am still searching for Proofreader
. Also expect Ch.2 somewhere around the weekend, I dont have much freetime if it isn't located between Friday and Monday
I KNEW SOMEONE WAS GOING TO WRITE A FINAL FANTASY FIC
Thank you for doing that
Too long delay is too long and forgetful Author is forgetful D: !
but somehow, it came back to me. Also since my summer vacations are starting today (as of this comment's date)
I really hope to be quicker the next few weeks! for real this time! Until then: peace out *cue FF Victory theme*
Sorry everypony, but finally I got to update my Story! I dont even know how I forgot my own work
Ah, I see!
Mash - Fighter
Twilight - Red Mage
Applejack - Black Belt?
Rainbow Dash - Thief?
eeyup, exactly like that. I thought this would be the most appropriate solution, given their Personalities(except maybe Mash's, but we'll, if ever, come to that later). I was actually suspecting someone would figure it out. All I have to do now is to find some Plot-strings to "assemble the Party" in the right way (since obviously, things will be different as they are in the game, like the Magic System for example), but I srly cant come up with an Idea who will come first (RD or AJ) or where to find them. Especially Rainbow, since she Probably wouldn't stay long at one Place. So if Someone got Ideas than I'm more than happy to incorporate them!