Proof
You take in a deep breath as you close your eyes and smile. You take in the scent of the small town in the early morning. You open your eyes and watch as the strange colorful equines walk around you, some waving and greeting you kindly. You wave back, making sure everyone knows that you mean no harm. It was hard for you when you first arrived here. All of the ponies in this town thought you were some weird monster here to attack them. Little did they know you were just a confused guy wondering how he woke up in this strange land.
Through all of that nonsense, only one pony ever seemed to give you the time of day. You had met a cyan pegasus mare the same day you woke up in this psychedelic world. She was the only one who treated you like the person you were. Thanks to Rainbow Dash, the rest of the town learned that you not a threat, and were just as friendly and kind as they were. You really owe your entire new life to your best friend, Rainbow.
You reach the end of the street you are currently walking down, and spot the average size house you had bought not too long ago. Thoughts of taking a nice warm shower after your morning walk flash through your head, and you close your eyes once more as your smile grows even larger. All of those feelings are knocked straight out of your mind when you feel a gust of wind hit your face like a bullet.
You open your eyes and look up, only to see your best friend hovering right there in front of you. Why is she holding a satchel?
"Hey Anon! Can I ask you for a favor?" Rainbow says to you, a large smile plastered over her face. You move the hair out of your face that had been moved by the gust of wind.
"Of course! I'd do anything for my best friend!" You say with a chuckle as you elbow her in the shoulder area. She blushes at your touch, but you don't seem to really notice.
"Y-Yeah, best friend! Anywany, I... kinda need you to read something for me..." She says, her usual cocky ego now replace with what seems like nervousness. You've never seen her like this before. You give her a questionable look, but decide to help her out anyway.
"Sure thing! But, can I ask, why do you want me to read it exactly? And what is 'it'?" You ask, still unsure of what it is exactly that you just signed up for.
"So, remember how you were telling me about all the stuff you did back where you were from? Well, I decided I would try some of it! I tried my hoof at that writing thing you said that you used to do." She pulls out a stack of papers all held together by a string that has been tied through a hole in the top corner of the stack of sheets. It's true, you told Rainbow about how you used to write fiction stories for fun. You never would have guessed Rainbow to really be one for literature, so you give her a somewhat confused look.
"So, you just want me to read it?" You ask, almost getting a peek at the first page before Rainbow can slap your hand away from the paper with a hoof.
"I want you to proofread it, y'know... make sure there aren't any grammar mistakes or... spelling, or whatever. Can you do that?" You think it over in your head for a second. You've never proofread anything that you didn't write before, but you suppose that there is a first time for everything. Eh, why the hell not.
"All right, wanna head over to my place? It's just down the street, and a lot less noisy than being out here." You suggest as you begin walking once more. Rainbow starts to follow behind you.
"Y-Your place? Yeah! Sure!" She shoots past you in a blur of colors before appearing as a solid object again in front of your house down the street. You really do admire her speed, it makes her special.
"You really gotta stop doing that Rainbow, you know I'm not that fast!" You say with a huff as you catch your breath from running over to her. She gives you an apologetic look before you open the door to your humble abode. Once inside, you open your windows to let in the sunlight. Man do you miss electric lights.
"So, can we get right to it? I'm really excited." Rainbow says as she basically jumps around the room in anticipation. You've only seen her act like this before Wonder Bolts shows, so this must be really important to her. You nod to her with a smile as you place the stack of papers down on a table in the living room. You pull up two chairs, and take the one on the left. Rainbow sits down to your right.
"Alright, lets see what we have here." You say as you flip a red pen around between your fingers. Thankfully you were wearing your school backpack when you woke up here, so you have plenty of writing utensils.
As you read through the story, you not only notice the horrible writing, but the characters seems often familiar to you. Why the heck did Rainbow write about a human, like you, falling in love with a pony that is describe as looking a lot like herself? You push those thoughts aside as you finish, and get ready to hit her with the hard truth.
"Sorry Rainbow, but I don't think you're going to be a world class author any time soon." You say bluntly.
"W-What's wrong with it? Is the story that bad?" She says, worry in her voice for some reason.
"The story is... decent. But that isn't what concerns me. There are grammatical mistakes, as well as spelling errors EVERYWHERE in this. How long did you spend on this Rainbow?"
"I was up all night writing it! Is it really that bad?" You scoot over closer to her, your arm brushing up against her shoulder. You don't notice, but her cheeks turn pink ever so slightly.
"While it isn't good, I have definitely seen worse. Now, I'm just a college student, but I'm sure you could get some lessons from Twilight." You say with a reassuring tone of voice.
"C-Can you teach me?" You notice her voice seems to be shaking a little as if she is nervous about something, possibly hiding something. You push it aside as you decide you would do anything for her. She is your best friend after all.
"I guess I could at least teach you the basics." You say with a small smile. You spend the next half hour teaching Rainbow about punctuation and grammar before you hear a knock at the door. Rainbow trots over to it before you can even turn your head to take a glance. You can see a bit of purple from around the now open door, and hear who you assume to be Twilight.
"Hey Rainbow! Did you tell him yet?" You hear Twilight ask. You look up from the papers, now interested in the conversation. Who is "he", and what didn't she tell him?
"Twilight! Shhh, he'll hear you!" You hear Rainbow attempt to whisper. She looks over at you, but you pretend not to have heard her. Are they talking about you?
"You really need to just tell him Rainbow, you've been keeping it a secret for two months!" Twilight also attempts to whisper, but fails miserably. Man, these ponies just aren't good at keeping their voices down huh?
"Tell me what?" You ask from the desk, still sitting down in your chair. Twilight's head pops out from around the door, and she gives you a sheepish smile.
"Nothing! Nothing at all!" Twilight says, thought you fail to believe her. Rainbow looks like she's ready to punch the daylights out of Twilight, but you still aren't sure why.
"Nope, you gotta tell me now." You say as you stand up. "You're both hiding something."
They both look at you like deer caught in headlights. Rainbow starts to cough, though you can tell it is fake. She gulps before sighing and looking up at you.
"I-I... kinda... like you?" She says nervously. She looks up at you, nervousness in her eyes.
"I like you too Rainbow, you're my best friend!"
"No! Like... I really like you... in a different way." You let the words sink in.
"Wait, was that story about us?" You ask as you connect the dots.
"Y-Yes, I was hoping you would catch on before I said anything..." Now she just looks plain sad, and Twilight doesn't look any better.
"How could I with all of that terrible grammar?" You say with a laugh as you pick Rainbow up off the ground. She looks at you with an unreadable expression, perhaps one of confusion.
"Wait, you aren't mad at me? I... thought you would hate me..." Her ears droop in the most adorable way possible.
"How could I hate someone like you?" You hug her against your chest, and you feel her wrap her legs around your back.
"S-So, will you... y'know, go out with me?" You think it over. She is a pony... ah what the heck. Its not like there are any human girls here anyway. This is really your only option.
"You bet." You say as you look down at Twilight you mouth the words, "Thank you." to her. She nods with a smile before walking back outside and disappearing around the corner.
"Now, what do you say we take another shot at that story?" You say as you carry Rainbow back over to the table.
"I'd love that."
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Cute, love it!
That was a really cute story, great job on it
Nice! Loved this!
I love finding stories like these and reading them.
This was awesome. Thank you for putting this up.
I'll admit that this is a cute story...keep up the good work!
cute story.
^ lol
Tfw the fic beats you to it.
This story reminds me of another fic that pretty much tells a similar story. It’s call “Please Proof Me!”.
However, I like the ending to this one better.
6903492 Really? I haven't read that one, is it too similar?
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The plots are the same but the stories are told differently.
They’re both about a clueless human that Rainbow Dash has a crush on. She tries to tell him about her secret feelings through a story she wrote but he still doesn't get it, and that’s where the similarities end. The other story has a little more in it then what you put in yours but yours was fun to read too. You should give it a read and see the differences between the two for yourself.
The best part for me in the other story was actually reading Rainbow’s horribly written fanfic. It was so bad, I couldn’t stop cringing and laughing while reading it.
6903492 Please proof me has a crap ending. It spoiled the whole fic for me.
Hated it! It was a cute nice little read but Anon! Give your human a name!!!!!! Why is there no "Anon" tag? I hate to read a nice little story just to have to down vote anon. Rant off(no I did not down vote it)
that was hilarious
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That's why I said I liked this stories ending more.
6904536 Well duh. I was agreeing with you. ffs.
6904098 Get over it.
6907667 No.
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Your problem is that he doesn't have a name despite the face he clearly has a name.
Full name Anon Jay smith. His dad is called Anthony and his mom is called Anna.
They wanted to name their child after them selves but were not sure if it would be a boy or a girl so they went with Anon.
6910810 What? The story said none of that.
I came here for reading rainbow and never got it, I'm disappointed
6910908 I made it up
My point was that what difference dose it make if he is called James or Steve instead of Anon?
None, Nada, Zip, Zero, Zilch.
In a world where Celebrities call their children Blanket, Rocket, Audio Science and Ocean to name a few why dose Anon bother you so much?
6913665 Ok what ever.
6913789 You didn't answer my question, Why dose Anon bother you so much?
6913799 I don't know for sure but it's like a itch I can not scratch. I did like this story Anon or not.
"Best friend!"
"Best friend!"
"Best friend!"
Now where have I seen that before?
Awesome, that end really made me... feel something
the meaning of best friend in a nutshell!
Okay I read it, just kind of dissapinted already that this is just a one-shot.
Okay I finished it, it is getting an upvote from me, but nothing more, it is really good, just to short for what I prefer.
If there is a sequel I would like to read it, maybe using this story as a prologue for a longe one? I kind of like the writing style.
You need to change 'often' to 'awfully' and a 'thought' to 'though'.
Otherwise great work! Write more pls
I loved this story so much I'm gonna make a fanfiction reading on it. Will give you credit.
7612654 Dude that's awesome! Let me know how it comes out!
7612887 Sure! I'm even gonna be adding some artwork & try to get some VA's IF POSSIBLE.
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It's out! :D
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w-n5IZhqKls
7643147 Awesome! I'll check it out :)
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Great! You'll <3 it!
7643719 It was great except the title says Ep3 but the description says Ep 2. Just a little heads up :P
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Thanks for the tip XD
Also I gave "Anon" a real name because there seems to be an uproar if your character is named anon for some reason XD
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No stop. Never stop.
The moral here today is spellcheck your love confessions/fanfiction.
It is unclear, though, why she'd fall in love with a human
. No one would ever notice, had such a thing occurred to two ponies, but for two creatures of different species it should either be more drama, or have more backbone. It's like a draft to a love story 
.
Also the human seems to be somewhat emotionless: "Yes, my absolute best friend? You want me to proofread your story? Sure, my ABF! Anything for you! Well, let's see here... (Oh my gosh, I wanna burn it, it hurts my eyes to see this kind of errors!) Let me teach you the basics, my ABF (starting from grade 2, perhaps
)... You like me?.. And would even marry me eventually?!.. ...Sure thing, my... no, no one has ever said anything about marriage, just that your liking me is that kind of liking... But sure, whatever... my ABF. By the way, I am not mad at you (even if I should be confused and be like: "Huh 
??!")... Boy, things have escalated way too quickly, my ABF!.. But... Sure. I will go on a kind of a pretend date (that's not a date, right? I should never date a pony... well, unless I do fall in love with one, but... 
...)".
See? There is no conflict. No turmoil. Just a dummy. And why make such a dull character, anyway
? Make me experience what that human is supposed to! Isn't it the whole point of telling in second-person??
And there's got to be no way Rainbow was that bad at writing! The way you described it -- she was pretty bad in classes. Or she was still in the first grade. She is mature enough to live all by herself, right? I'm pretty sure she had passed the final test in Language at a grade higher, than D (that's my assumption, anyway).
Also the human should have at least raised his eyebrow a couple of times. How was he so blind not to notice the similarities
?
Like, had it been me there, I would have been like: "Ex... cuse me? Am I reading this right?.. You have...quite peculiar interests, Dashie... But you should have totally invented a more creative way to establish romance. You see, inserting real people (or ponies, for that matter) may ruin their dignity. Fiction is fiction, because the characters are fictitious (as a rule of thumb)", -- and so on. And upon hearing her confess I would have, well, reacted? Like, what??! (
.) I am confused on -- so many levels 
...
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Fellows, I feel compelled to explain, why there is a revulsion.
When it comes to naming characters, choosing them names is no easy task. It takes contemplation to give him a fitting name. Does "Anon" fit the character? It might. It could be a very good name... were it not for there being a certain lack of education to many people, who used to chat on image boards and the like, back when there were almost no good sites to dwell. You see, %username% could be substituted for one's online nickname. Of course, anonymous users would have no nicknames at all, which was why their %username% would be "Anon". Further, not always was there such a variable available. And some people thought, it was witty to insert "you" (whoever was reading their creations) as the protagonist, hence the string "Anon", rather than the var. %username%.
Yet some rather educated people knew, it was unconventional for a decent piece of literature to refer to "you" as to "Anon" (since there had been ways to refer to "you" way before the Internet even was conceived). These educated folks must have passed their education on. A decent writer never names his/her character "Anon": it has a certain touch of filth (
) that can be found among rather perverted posts on some sites (not to mention, such places' dwellers were writers themselves rarely). A decent writer might, however, make his/her creation look like such a post -- the name "Anon" is thus justified 
.
Here ends the lesson.
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I know the name Anon is justified that is the point I was making. But thanks for clearing that up on an argument that ended 3 years ago.
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Didn't she drop out of school? Now, I personally like to imagine that she went back, and got enough of an education that busting storm clouds wouldn't damage her, as she would need a certain level of education for that to be true, but there's nothing in the show pointing to this fact. Also! The title of this story deserves the following song:
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: "Did I what out of what??"
: "Dafq??"Disregard that...If she did, she must have been a pretty unfortunate filly, because only "losers for life" are supposed to study terribly, to drop out and to get undesirable, despicable jobs. But... we know for a fact, that RD is way too awesome
to be called a loser! It is not to say she was a grade-A student like Twilight... but I think, she did OK.
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: "Did I what out of what??"
Then why weren't you in the Wonderbolts from the beginning, Dash? They are, after all a military organization, and you saving the world countless times could be seen as on the job training for that kind of thing...
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Why?..
I guess, because the sempais would never notice me (
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They wouldn't notice the pony that performed the Sonic Rainboom? Your smarter than this, Dash! By a bit, at least. Who wouldn't notice the Sonic Rainboom?
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)... The awesomest pegasi in the world (
)!.. Ah!.. Maybe, they just wanted to prove me to be their match? Oh, yeah, and a match I! Am (
)!
That's right, everypony would!.. But... you know them sempais (
(
) Not that kind of match, Pinkie!..
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]
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But wouldn't saving their lives at the best young flyer competition, along with Rarity's, and still managing to do a Sonic Rainboom with all of that deadweight weighing you down have convinced them?
Yeah, Dash. I think maybe they were waiting for ya to teach your honorary little sister how to fly.
Which you never did, even though you totally could have!
And now it's too late!
Yes girls, thanks for that...Anyway, pardner, like Ah was sayin', they were waiting for y'all to teach your little sister how to fly. When it became apparent that ya were never going to, they made you a Wonderbolt so that she could say that she was sisters with a Wonderbolt.
Which was cool, at first, but then I realized that I would never step out of your shadow, so I decided to join the washouts!
That didn't turn out so well...
It could've been worse...
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: But!.. But... But, Scootaloo!.. (
)
...
Well...
...Um, Scootaloo?.. I'm calling ya! Yes, of course it means you! "Es-te-el" is how I spell your name (from now on): "STL"! As in "Scootaloo", but, y'know... Radical names
!
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it's not? You mean you'll teach me?
Btw...if this doesn't happen in Gen 5 now, I'mma gonna quit life.