Things can go wrong quickly in the 25th century. What was a vacation for your average kid is now an identity crisis in a world that isn't black and white and line between real and unreal is erased. Your friends aren't who you think they are
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Its kinda funny that the time you hint a possible clop chapter is the time this gets featured
edit: awww its allready gone from the board
It's 1 AM and you have made my brain turn into pure, undiluted happy.
I got used to the sporadic at best update schedule.
Seeing consistent updates has made me as giddy as a schoolgirl every time I see the email about a new chapter.
Clop? Clop.
THEY IS SO ADOWABUL
*Gets back from movies sees update, reads, begins fantasizing about giant robots tearing apart canterlot whilst fighting Kaiju* Well... Fuck now I have to go find another updated story to read.
spitfires sister.........................what is the reaction to be? pure rage? acceptance? forgiveness? or all of them in that order?
Heeeeelll yeaaaaaaaah! One of my favorite chapters here :D
Found some errors in the writing, but nothing major. I'm going to wait a bit before posting them, because I'm tired :P
2983096 humans are perverts.
I've got to say this is one of those stories for me. I have become over the course of reading this, emotional attached. What I have read here by you is one of the best and emotionally stimulating pieces of literature I have ever read. It is on the level of professional writers I have loved and cherished. I know that it hasn't finished but my internet time is going to be virtually zero for up to 3 months. So if you have finished this by then I would like to say thank you. Thank you for all the hours past I have snuck late at night or even earlier morning to read this. Thank you for a outlet when I was in a darker head space. But most of all thank you for showing people with Jet and Spit's that a little courage is the real magic of the universe and if we wield it, well, life has a way of giving alittle magic back.
so... until next time.
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I cannot wait to see what's left.
Took me nearly a week but I read it all. Gotta say I liked it, I am pretty careful with HiE and add anthro to it and half the time I would just drop the story, glad I didn't. I love philosophy and I loved it in this story. There were certainly mistakes that can be fixed and improvements to be made but nothing that really stuck out enough for me to remember. I look forward to whatever you have left in this story, keep up the good work.
i read this in a day..and i need more...
3053515 Took me over a year to write...
But anyway, glad you like it. More is coming soon.
Finally! Poor Jett's life is finally looking up! I've always wanted Jett to be happy I this story. Ever since the first chapter when I started reading this story almost a year ago, you've made Jett a likable and realistic character.
Wow, I haven't checked the story in a month and now I had a lot of awesome chapters to read! Thanks man, I didn't even have to drink coffee to keep me awake thru an entire night, that's how interesting they were! :D
By the way, judging by Author Notes in chapters and comments, the story is few chapters from ending, but will there be CyberFire 2 or any other sequel made by you, or will you let someone else make it?
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!
... Well after reading this story, I'd say that the word that best describes this story is
overdone.
Like seriously. Everything from the fight scenes - which sometimes felt forced - to the heartfelt confession - which really should have just been a simple statement, not a 500 word essay - to the damn mood swings, to the establishment of a character - the amount of times that Dane was asserted to be a pervert was TOO DAMN HIGH for one and not in a way that it was a recurring joke.
I read that post at the beginning of the story that the author said he was going to have to go over the top and I thought "This is going to hurt."
And not in a good way, like "OMG THESE FEELS ARE TOO MUCH!!!" but as in "Did he [the author] really have to do that?"
Don't get me wrong, I loved the story. 9/10 would recommend. But this is something to work on.
Beyond that, other things that stood out to me are that the fight scenes felt clunky - but only sometimes - and there were some times when you just misspelled a word and it really stud out. <- Like that.
However the more basic interactions in this story were written really well. Like the cruise - 10/10. Jett flying the car - 10/10.
Android, you've done well. Don't forget to keep improving.