Things can go wrong quickly in the 25th century. What was a vacation for your average kid is now an identity crisis in a world that isn't black and white and line between real and unreal is erased. Your friends aren't who you think they are
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Ansible. Ender's Game anyone
My computer alone has 2 Exabyte of processing power.
FALSE
power is measured in Hz, Bytes are used for Memory and Storage. get your facts straight.
Ender's Game :D
Looks really good so far!!
849234 I noticed the Ansible too~
Yeah, facts and grammar need to be attained. I'd finish reading this, but I don't feel like giving myself a migraine from the impending mental strain.
Bleargh. I checked this out from the feature box. Not a good idea.
Your narration needs work. I swear, you were doing a stream of consciousness from Jett's perspective. There's a good (or perhaps bad?) number of errors in there, too. Comma splices galore (“No I’m a crazed criminal who’s come to invade your home, who else has the key to the house?”), misspelled words laying all over the place ("reparable"), and some pretty ridiculous ideas of how physics works, no matter how advanced the future gets ("The port side engine was on fire and pieces of the wing were disintegrating."). The fact that it's PoE doesn't help. Nor do the gratuitous swearing ("shit" x8, "fuck"x6) and silly moments ("Fallen tree for the win").
Edit: Despite looking for it again, it seems this story is attempting to hide the fact that it was up there in the feature box for a tad. Unless I'm going crazy. If so, I must apologize.
I see you like Halo, Considering all the references.
849234 yay! Uranium spoons!
I don't know why.
But I liked this story so much, I've ended up re reading it.
Jc6 your top mate
Liked!
Great start! Some spelling and grammatical errors but still, great start!
849234 I saw ONI so........Halo
2748868 Dude or gal... it's a benchmark story, give em a break.
I have found this story once more it's been years since I have read it
8643919
Same man. Coming back to it after all this time. Just as good as I remembered
Shoulda put anthro tag so I wouldn't have had to go through half a chapter before quitting
9632010
There's literally a tag there already and a warning in the description. Not my fault you couldn't be bothered to read it properly.
9632786
No there isn't an anthro tag at all.