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TheCyberneticAlicorn


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In the far of land of New Questria, the use of steam power has enveloped the land. Machines are now an everyday thing and the world has broken up into distinct factions. The most distinct factions are the Skyway Airfleet, the faction of the Pegasus. With their own flight and the steam powered leviathans they have designed, the Pegasus rule the sky. While the Earth Ponies have several of their own faction, the biggest one is the Clockwork Dominion, a faction so big that one of the major New Questria cities is named by them. Most of the Earth Ponies, with this new technology, have long since forgotten the natural ways of their ancestors, though there are patches of natural Earth Ponies that still remain. With the shift to steam power and the less reliance on the old ways of magic, the Unicorns are rarely ever seen, but they are not unheard of. The sight of a Unicorn is a head turning event and will often spark rumors.

This story is about a young Unicorn alchemist called Syn Thysis and his steam powered pet snake Gadget.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 13 )

705759

I have wondered myself what would happen to Equestria as technology progressed. At some point Technology becomes indistinguishable from magic.

Oh and i may watch this.

I really like the idea of this story, and where it's going. You get a fav.

But, you wouldnt happen to have an editor or pre-reader, would you? Grammatically, and sentence structure-wise, this needs a lot of work.

Other than that, not bad.

706243
yeah i know it needs work, but i don't have anyone to edit and what not other then myself. and i always seem to miss stuff.

that said, i do appreciate the fav and the constructive circumcision

Well, if you do need someone to edit, I'd be more than happy to help you out. I only have one story that I try to update on Sundays, and usually do a striaght run-through when I do so. Not to mention that i used to pre-read my two friends', but their both on hiatus. So, I'm free to help out a writer in need...

...should you need one. I really do want this story to continue, though. A little editing/proofreading wouldnt hurt, is all.

Cheers.

706375

well that would be great if you would be willing to pre-read and edit for me. I do plan to continue with the story cause i have a bunch of ideas for it. I'll just be juggling it with my other ongoing title.

I can do that. Just shoot me a PM when you need to, and I'd be more than willing to help out.

Nice. I'd like to see this continued.

I think you should integrate the description of the mechs in the story, it feels a bit odd to have it there as an author note.

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i do plan to continue this, i have just been bogged about with looking for a job and trying to get into college that i have not had much free time

also i agree about the mech thing, i just have not figured out a way as of yet to integrate it

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