Twilight Sparkle makes a mistake, and the whole world changes overnight for her. Friends are torn, Princesses are hated, and the paradise of Equestria turns violent. Friendship is at it's darkest moment, and all the odds are stacked against it. Twilight needs her friends more than ever, but can they trust her after the things she's done? What's causing this series of events to happen, is anything under control anymore? So much is brought into question as the seeds of distrust are placed in Equestria. It's a dark time to be a princess.
Chapters (3)
This seems interesting. Hope you`ll keep working on it.
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thanks, already making a draft of the second chapter. it involves moonbutt and tea.
6705749 Awesome man! Can`t wait to read it.
If you couldn't win, lost on your conditions.
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are you checking grammar? where is that at? i seriously can't find it lol
thanks by the way
Twilught invested so much effort to raise ponies to her level, that it frightfully how easy to Starlight lower princess on her level.
Sorry for cynicism and bad English.
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It's just my thoughts about events of chapter. You have my interest. Tracking.
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that's perfectly fine. i appreciate the comment!
Probably will freak some out, but Twilight can easily prove that this was a case of self defense, even if Starlight WASN'T doing anything to choke Spike and Twilight just thought that she was.
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well if it were easy it wouldn't be an interesting story now would it...
As if NOT telling was a good idea. Most likely will it them in the butt later and they know it. I'm surprised that Luna got to her before the guards did.
By the way, the pace seems fine, at least to me.
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maybe it's just me, writers hate what they write usually anyways
and i'd imagine it'd be pretty hard to deliver grim news. but yeah it's gonna bite them in the butt if you will.
or maybe kill them all
Omg I absulutely love stories like these.
how many chapters are there gonna be.I must know!
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so far i've got five plus planned, it'll probably be less than ten. depends on what i like more and what works more and how long things will take. glad you enjoyed it!
Really hope that Starlight dead. Not because I hate her. Just very interesting to see reaction of Princesses when they understood that they have a deal with someone who ready to die for her ideals, not their usual villain.
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there's a good chance for that. i like that idea as well. but of course there's more to it than that...
I absolutely love mystery stories!but next time you should add to the emotional feelings.
Try reading one of pen strokes stories and you will get a 20/20 picture of what you need.
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add to the emotional feelings? can you elaborate?
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I mean explain what is going on in their heads.what their thoughts and feelings are.
Ex.
(Descriptive)Twilight made to open the door.her heart was racing anticipating what vile creature wait at the other end.the heavy breathing at the other end did absolutely nothing to calm the mood.
Vs.
(Non-Descriptive)Twilight reached out a hoof to open the door and found a vile craeturew waiting at the other end.
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uh
alright
i'll make it even descriptier
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Descriptier...haha a little humor to it seems
Lulu, Cadee, Twily :3