Discord Explains

The Cutie Mark Crusaders were looking for Fluttershy to explain some expression to them. For worse or for better, they found Discord instead.
Rated 'T' for mischievous Discord.

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Ernest Wood

Ernest Wood #1 · Nov 1st, 2015 · · ·

Review.

In the long description I noticed a error (Or at least I think, so) Shouldn't it be: The Cutie Mark Crusaders? And instead of something i'd write something other than something cause it makes you sound a little lazy in my opinion.

Now as for the story the I noticed that when a character spoke there wasn't spacing in between the words. Usually it helps to have that spacing as it makes the sentences easier to read. Other than that the story looks fine to me. I didn't see to many grammar mistakes that disrupted the flow of the story. Maybe consider getting an editor.

-Ernest

AlexMalkavian

AlexMalkavian #2 · Nov 2nd, 2015 · · ·

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In the long description I noticed a error (Or at least I think, so) Shouldn't it be: The Cutie Mark Crusaders?

I'm always in doubt when it comes to use of articles, but on MLP wikia it's 'The Cutie Mark Crusaders', so you're probably right.

And instead of something i'd write something other than something cause it makes you sound a little lazy in my opinion.

Well, I am lazy :). And bad with descriptions. Replaced it with 'some expression'.

Now as for the story the I noticed that when a character spoke there wasn't spacing in between the words. Usually it helps to have that spacing as it makes the sentences easier to read.

Hmm, I don't know why did I forget about this. Added spacing, thanks.

Ernest Wood

Ernest Wood #3 · Nov 2nd, 2015 · · ·

6593058 I try bro. :)

BubbleBerryBlitz

BubbleBerryBlitz #4 · Nov 2nd, 2015 · · ·

Haha oh Faust that was hilarious!! Haha That was absolutely amazing! Thank you, I was expecting something completely different and then just... Ugh... dammit Discord, why you do this?

Frazzled Pony

Frazzled Pony #5 · Nov 28th, 2015 · · ·

Funny. Not much else to say.

Snowdrifter

Snowdrifter #6 · Dec 8th, 2015 · 1 · ·

“And just so you know,” Discord-Number-One added, climbing onto the swings behind Eris, ”we both swing both ways!”

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Omnishifter

Omnishifter #7 · Sep 23rd, 2017 · · ·

Wow, Discord caught me by surprise, instead of taking an opportunity to teach the CMC about something they shouldn't know about just yet, he subverts what we would expect and gives an answer to their question that both works with what they were asking, and avoids anything sexual... (applause) Oh Discord, you've done it again