The Grand Opening of Canterlot Boutique is underway and sadly those left behind have their doubts.
Lots can happen from the first day or who will be left in the dust ?
Written for the EQD writers training ground 'Canterlot Boutique prompt'
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Well, she lives in the Crystal Empire, not Canterlot.
To get it from the top, the Summary needs to be reworked in a more comprehencable formate and included Paragraphs.
As Rarity put it; "It is all in the presentation!".
6436231 Ok including paragraphs .......
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6437254 Should make for a much happier and more positive croud of readers. You do want to give them an image of what the story is about, without giving away the details they are to read.
Oh, and I imagine they are picky at EQG.
Poor Spike
the stories all crumled up into paper balls.
He only managed a few drawings, from the looks.
6438147 I just got sloppy
My bad
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I started to read this fanfiction, but I had to stop after a few paragraphs. It's a good idea you have here, but your sentence construction is weird and it's impossible to read it smoothly when you have to ponder about what is meant in every second sentence.
You should get an editor if sentence construction is such a problem for you, the way it's currently written makes it unreadable.
6463893 It's meant to be a little weird. . .