(Collab) Two questionable friends get together for a week-long vacation trip in one of the most relaxing places in the world. But the trip doesn't go exactly as planned.
Then again, nothing ever goes 'exactly as planned'.
Being thrown into a whole new world, however, is something that definitely wasn't planned. Whether they'll enjoy their stay or not is questionable, but one thing is for sure.
Things will not be the same.
A collaboration with this bastard. He is in charge of Branden Bort's dialouge. The Rainbow Explosion
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(Please note that we came up with this idea while shooting down helicopters while in a helicopter with miniguns)
Chapters (2)
The story is shit. The authors are shit. Every single word is shit. The authors can suck dick.
6261241 I give it a 9/11.
I liked the first chapter, good characterization overall. But this 2nd one comes off as really generic to me... all subpar HIE stories seem to use the old played out "human passes out, ponies find and bring him to ponyville, then human reacts." formula.
Seems like a waste of the first chapter. Sorry.
6261601 To be honest, I made it like that just so it could pass moderation and such. I kept screwing up on that.
Also, the whole 'passing out' cliche is very subpar, and I agree with you wholeheartedly, but we felt like it would fit.
We plan on redoing the chapter, but I'll try to avoid doing such chapters, or any similar in the future.
6261375 If you were to check a bulls anus you wouldn't find any shit, because it's all right here.
A couple of typos and whatnot, but this is looking good you two, so far I'm hooked on it.
First chapter had me laughing, hehehe. Frigging gun smugglers tho XD hahaha.
Nice job again, and good work.
Can't wait for more
6261643 Yeah, passing out like a bitch does sound cliche, but a concussion plus exhaustion would easily make a grown man pass out, and adrenalin can only keep you going for so long.
Just found your technically new story but I like it :D
LIEK FOR THE STORY!
