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Asteroid was told by her mother that she needed to finally meet her Godmother and their family.
But when she gets to Equestria, she falls instantly in love with Twilight's oldest daughter.
The biggest problem is that they live in different universes. The next biggest?
The fact that their fathers are the same person.
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> E-rated
> "incest" in the title.
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Well, it's not utterly terrible, but it has the two problems one always encounters whenever writing a NextGen fic:
1. If the author wants to write about the Mane 6's children, they usually have to hook them up with six stallions (unless magical lesbian spawn is involved). This means six ships and six more occasions for readers to rage quit because of the ship they don't like.
2. It's hard to figure out who is whose child, not to mention that people with attention span as short as mine have a constant problem with remembering the OC's names.
Also, to make things worse, you shipped Twilight with Flash Sentry. While there's nothing wrong with that, fimfiction is full of neckbeard fucktards who'll downvote you to hell.
Another problem generally stems from, I guess, inexperience in writing, as well as the fic unoriginality. There's a plenty of next gen fic, some of them, like kilalaverse, quite popular. And totally radical edgy lesbian teenagers were done to death in fanfiction long before MLP appeared. The chapters so far are short and not really attention-grabbing. And those names... I keep wondering whether Trigger is a sharpshooter or some Chanty Binx's expy...
6245078 I can see where you're coming from, but real quick, Bumper and Trigger are basically references to game controllers. Like, LB and RB, LT and RT.
6245029 fimfiction also accepted the story as is, so there's nothing really wrong with the title.
Why you didn’t continue the story