Absolutely perfect beginning keep it going you have a strong beginning

I’ve been waiting for a story like this for a bit! I don’t exactly like the characters behavior but that’s not a writing problem rather I just don’t like the guy lol. To me this story as a lot of potential and I feel like you’ll do a great job fulfilling it but hey, that’s just my opinion. ;)

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Thank you very much! I do have some character development in mind for the protagonist, that is if I can do it right. Writing is not my strong suit, but this story is something I've still been thinking about for some time.

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Thank you! I do hope I'll be able to keep strong, or at least entertaining.