WHY DIDN'T THIS APPEAR IN MY FEED?!?!?

I see a mistake, not enough of this story! I need more!

Did this seriously appear in the last 2 minutes!?

I wanted another, did not expect it this quickly

5684931 hear you there

5684951 There will be human/pony relationships as the story goes on.

This story is like drugs. I got my fix already but I still nead more from it. Keep up the good job man I realy like this story so far. Btw will be there some world building too the onlything this story will contain is the war part?

5684977 *chuckles* Oh, yes, there will be world-building. So much world-building.

SCOTTY! WE NEED MORE STORY!!!

Is this story set in a pre-existing universe? (Are there other stories set in the exact same universe and this is just one event in it?)

5684998 Not that we are aware of! We created this setting from scratch.

5685007 Well this is a good place to start!

Maybe a prequel that shows their first few interaction?

Quick I'm signing up to be in the offensive! Must.Save.Derpy!

Seraph beware! Humanity has come and they are here to kick ass!
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Oh and, you're featured for a while now...

Was listining to this while reading...

Many feels were had.

But seriously i love these kinds of stories. Where humans and equines (including the inhabitants of the Griffon lands, Zebrica, etc...) all join forces. I can't help but feel that in some small way if we were to find Equestia we would opt to befreiend them.

I also notice these types of stories tend to be in our relative future, perhaps this is a precurser to how we would react to an alien ally? Humanity has been alone for so long and stories like these really give me hope that humanity can bee better, that we can fight FOR someone instead of for greed.

My only complaint is the enemy. They sort of come out of nowhere, and seemingly have no motavation. Hopefully that will change as the story progresses.

I hope this story gets tons of views and likes

Stay Gold...

Just one question, is one of the ships gonna be based on this can of whoopass?

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Cause if there is one, then all i have to say is:
MAC rounds loaded!!

Eh. I'd say starting in the middle like this weakens the story. Seeing how things go downhill in the war, and how the humans and equestrians build trust and support would give these scenes much more impact.

5684924 Y' know, that's kinda what I was wondering about mine, too! It seems like I don't get notifications on anything that I have up in my "Especially Special Favorites" Bookshelf, except for when it comes up in my "Tracking" Bookself!

And that's not only weird, it's aggravating!

Now, that said.........

Well, alright! A second chapter?! So soon?! Ohhhh, yes, please!

And this chapter was absolutely great! Loved it! Like I said before, you guys make an absolutely great team, Cody! Keep up the rad work, okay? I'm hungry for more!

And it looks like the Seraphs are starting to get their slimey tails kicked! Good!

Hopefully, they get them kicked clean off of Equus, and back to wherever they came from!

went online to see if I could find something that mimicked this battle and I could not find anything better then this

but still a good find

Now this is just nine kinds of fun.

Oooh, sounds interestin--- wait, she was assaulted?!

humanity and Equuskind have traded through a portal which opens once a month in deep space: technology, letters, food and so much more. This trade has fostered an incredibly friendly relationship between the two civilizations, only stopped by their inability to send anything living through the portals.

No one ever thought to put on a space suit?

If all this other stuff makes it through intact and functional (especially the technology), I can't fathom why a human or pony wearing a protective outer covering would have any issue.

5685390 There was a type of radiation produced by the portal that killed any living thing that passed through it. As such, they only recently discovered a way to counter-act that.

5685351 You mean Taelea, I'm assuming.

And that's what Cody said in a recent blog-post (I think). I've been meaning to PM them about it, just in case she doesn't want to talk about it publicly.

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5685351 Unfortunately, there were a few people who did not take well to Taelea's... ahem, life preferences, and decided to take that out on her. We won't go into explicit detail on what happened.

Just one l'il question/comment about the name of President of the Terran Republic, which is.........

President Marcus Tabor

?!

I thought that his name was:

President Marcus Tanbor

!

I know that that sounds like a l'il quibble, but I just though that you guys might like to know about it.

5685466 I see. Well, that's good enough for me. Give her my regards, my love, and a heartfelt "Get well soon!" for me, will you?

Also, please tell her that she has my support in her life, okay? Thanks.

And on that one note, what she chooses to do in her life preferences is her business, not theirs, and they need to get that through their thick skulls! Her life, her choice. Not theirs. Period.

Also, I hope that she pressed charges on these idiots. They need to understand that assault, on anyone, for any reason, at all, is totally and completely un-acceptable So maybe a stint in the calaboose would get that point across to them.

5685444 Uh-huh... how did they get close enough to it to send anything through? Emitted radiation doesn't stay put. Unless it's magical radiation that doesn't obey the laws of physics. Not to mention, high radiation can play havoc with modern tech.

This sort of thing just bugs me, as a scientist.

It's why mixing magic and science tends not to work well thematically, because the two concepts are usually mutually exclusive and contradictory. It takes careful weaving of the plot threads and various notions from each to keep them from clashing and creating plot holes and lapses in continuity of usage.

So far, im not sure if its possible to make this even 20% cooler. Cant wait for more!

This has to be the most epic first two chapters of a war-fic I've read in a long time, keep going!

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agreed, but im scared. nothing was mentioned about the changelings i hope they arent dead.

5685647 Changelings'll be fiiiiiine. They make the best spies, that's for damn sure.

5685647 Actually they were mentioned... Their queen is fighting alongside Twilight

Color me intrigued.

Oh my gosh all of my yes! I need moar! Please

noticed starve was miss-spelled below, also very nice story so far
Applejack cursed herself and her damn stubbornness (under her breath, of course), as she jinked and ducked her way through the mass of screaming, panicking ponies and roaring, blood-thirsty Seraph. The Apple family had done their damnest to organize a mass exodus from Ponyville when it became apparent that the Royal Guard could no longer hold the Seraph ground forces. For a month, they had all done their best to provide as much food for the refugees, to give everything they had so that the ponies and other races hiding in Canterlot wouldn't start. But they had waited too long, and now... now they were paying for it.

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they are, ill have to reread it.

5685813 *looks at some color palates* What shade is that?

5685939 That was the visual feed on the helmets view screen i think.

5686106 Between envious bile and neon puke.

One word describes these 2 chapters best.
EPIC!
I realy hope the next chapter comes out soon. I await it with great anticipation.

This chapter... I like it. ANOTHER!!!

This story is awsome can't wait for more.

Give them hell Terrans, give them hell.

"Assault ships, move in!" The President's voice barked over the comm, "Pass under the fields of fire, and get down to the Equush lines! Protect Canterlot with your lives!"

GIVE 'EM HELL, YEEEAHHHHHHH!!!!!! Smoke me a Seraph; I'll be back for breakfast!

On the one hand, this looks really cool.

On the other hand, I just checked the co-author's other work, and, well . . .

How worried should I be?

You had me till this:

The race that believed that they could steal away the race that had saved humanity from itself, its greed and need for war.

Then you lost me. Good luck on the story and good luck in recovery.

The armor was built like the armor of ancient knights, though the helmet was sleek, with a plexiglass faceplate that could stop a rifle bullet at point blank range.

actually, a more likely material for Victoria's Faceplate would be the Polycarbonate Plastic known under the Trade name Lexan. I guess Humanity advanced Plastics Technology enough where a thinner, Lighter, and MUCH Tougher form of Lexan was invented (which eliminated the need of actual Glass for Bulletproofing), and more than likely, her face plate has an extremely advanced version of the Flexible AMOLED Technology we currently have, which displays Victoria's HUD, and masks her face to the outside world, as well as providing Protection from the Sun, like Sunglasses.

I'll be honest. The story isn't bad, but it could be quite a bit better. I really don't feel like expanding on the reasons too much, but I'd like to mention one thing that really stands out and absolutely destroyed my suspension of disbelief.

You made a point that the president came from a humble background, and not as a child but as an adult which makes a huge difference. That hurt, but didn't destroy my SOD. The fact that the president is leading the battle and issuing direct commands just blew it out of the water. From car salesman to president to naval officer / admiral? The fact that the head of state is doing so from one of the ships participating directly in the battle is just the icing on the cake.

Overall, I think the biggest thing this story is missing so far is any kind of world building. Writing a checklist of things that exist in this world (telling, not showing) doesn't invest me in what's happening. I just can't bring myself to care about what happens to any of these characters, human or pony.

Just a few thoughts I had. Good luck on the rest of the story.

You keep up the awesome you got going, this thing will eventually dominate everything HiE without question.

Battle scenes of course have to end at some point, so best of luck when you get to the quieter portions.

It's a badass start, that's for sure!

EXPLOSIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!! SO MANY EXPLOSIONS! CHUCK WOULD BE SHOCKED WITH IT ALL! anyone know Saxton Hale?