Ah, come in, come in! Have a seat, it's still good and warm from my last visitor. Just kick back and relax. I know what you came for, after all. I got my narrative polished and ready, just for you; it'll pull those heartstrings. Or maybe should I say, for your pretty little Princess, because that's who you answer to.
You want to know why, and what, and how, and when I shot Ms. Kindness and her companion. Is this a confession? Why, I wouldn't know. Maybe I just watched. It could have been self defense. I'm sure your boss would deny it, but we all saw her for what she was: a monster. And I put her down. I'm nothing like her, and I'll tell you why. I'll tell you what my heart told me...
Chapters (2)
Color me intrigued. I wasn't all that fond of the style at the very beginning, but it grew on me. I look forward to seeing where this goes,
Wait, this story is incomplete? C'mon, that's no fair. I guess I can read the first chapter and give you what I think, but I'm not gonna review an incomplete story.
Well, your style is still a little tricky to get through, but thus far this story is interesting and I want to know more. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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It's not gonna be that long, friendo. And apparently Incomplete tags are like ninjas to you
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I forgot my crayons Boots! But thanks for the comments geese; it's like my source of power or something.
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Indeed, all black and stealthy and tricky. Fear the incompletes!
On an unrelated note, I forgot to mention that you should avoid using swear words in your stories. Some people will downvote and/or turn away from a story based on that alone because of some bullshit about 'cursing doesn't belong in Equestria.' Just thought I should mention it, feel free to stick to your guns.
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If I don't stick to the guns, then I'd have to go all the way and make the twist something like 'she actually shot her with a spitball and they're fine'.