This is in the point of view from Lyra* and how she takes on a world of destruction. I came up with this story after reading some of Fallout Equestria and Some other war stories and songs. I hope you all enjoy this I MAY make more if asked. Trixie was the only villain I had in mind which is more capable to go insane than a random citizen. Yes I tried to kill as many waifus as I could.
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Seeing the Feedback so far I will take this to my advantage and next time I decide to write (Which is soon) I will take these and fix the next. This isn't my best work it could have been better if I focused on this instead of Team Fortress 2 and Being lazy and not making a cover art.
A mistake in the description
Other than that, I cant see how this story could be too bad from the cover, however I do question how the title
fits into the theme of what is in essence World War 3 in Equestria (I guess that would be called the Equis War or something like that)
Five chapters, just barely over fifteen hundred words? Nope.
5522814 Alright thank you it was late when I started and I didn't bother to fix that I plan to fix these in future. The title I actually could not think of I was going to change it up a bit yet I stuck with it. Thank you for feedback this will be used in future.
5523288 I have done a lot better than this I will use information feedback for future writings, Thanks!
5523425 Not a very huge anime fan but I can understand exactly what you mean, Thanks!
1: that is not a description of the story, those are author notes... really badly written author notes.
2: unless it's a stylistic thing, chapters should never be less than 1000 words each
5524013 Alright thanks for the feedback this will be fixed in future projects.
It's exceedingly short, being completely read in about 5-10 minutes; it's rushed, having no real character development, back-story, or adequate descriptions of the events; and a revision of your use of punctuation would be advisable.
5524431 Alright bro thanks for your feedback!
5523288 I just now noticed that...
...well I sure do look like an idiot now...
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I'm not going to leave a rating, because I didn't like the story. It did not have good quality, BUT it has amazing potential. Don't be afraid to have long chapters. this story seemed to me like only a brief summary of a longer story, one that takes place over the course of five months rather than five days. Add filler but not too much, add smaller plot-lines or flashbacks to explain how Vinyl died and how Trixy survived. How did the wars begin? how did they end? how did they flare up again? Believe in yourself. I would love to see this story redone and extended, good luck.