I am Nick

My OC visits Equestria

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Chapter One · 7th Jan 2015 · 188 words
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Chapter Two · 7th Jan 2015 · 207 words
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Chapter Three · 7th Jan 2015 · 116 words
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Chapter Four · 7th Jan 2015 · 130 words
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Chapter Five · 7th Jan 2015 · 238 words
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Chapter Six · 7th Jan 2015 · 162 words
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ThunderWonder #1 · Jan 7th, 2015 · · · Chapter Six ·

Princess Celestisa came out from my tears!

This is a trollfic, isn't it? On the off chance that it isn't, I'm gonna lend you a little advice.

With that, we took to the stars, but not before burning down my house, and the house of my enemies with the Proncess' magical moon beams.

Nevermind. I think I'll just point out the moments of stupidity and obvious trolling.

I had a horn, and wings! I was an Alicorn! A red Alicorn!

Do you realize what you have just brought upon yourself?

"I can take you to sweet Apple Achers if you want hun. Just let me and Twilight just finish up with some stuff." Applejack replied.

What sort of 'stuff', Applejack? Is there some TwiJack going on?

"Hey! You look 110% more awesome than me!

Said Rainbow Dash never.

Fluttershy said nothing, instead she whimpered.

Get out of there, Fluttershy! Get out before his Gary Stu powers affect you too!

I sat down, not saying everything, just letting the mares take in the beauty that was me! Things were finally looking up for me in Equestria, as a RISING STAR OF GREATNESS.

RED ALICORN SELF-INSERTS ARE NOT BEAUTIFUL. THEY LOOK KIND OF UGLY TO BE HONEST.

"GUYS, GUYS! THERES A NEW CHANGLING INVASION!" I yelled. Everyone turned and gasped at what I had just said. Twilight Sparkle was the first one to respond. We all agreed to just charge out there and hope,for the best. Turns out, we defeated the Changling invasion and lived happily ever after!

There are no words.

We all had a great time, and I even got to dance with my crush: Twilight!

Yes, because there was just so much character interaction, development, and foreshadowing.

When I got back, I discovered that my parents had been killed. Looking up, I saw two robbers, and gave chance to them.

The edginess... it's too much!

I started to fly, being Celestia's actual son, and whacked them upside the head.

what

I laughed, then breathed fire from my mouth, burning them.

You know, I get the feeling that the unnamed protagonist is a pyro.

I liked the idea that I was able to kill, so I killed everything in sight with just my mind. Even the United States Army wasn't enough to stop me. Soon the whole world was under my control, and I loved every second of it!

what

Even my own mother came to see me on my death bed. She congratulated me on a job well done, then put a knife through my heart, killing me instantly. The end.

Wait, hold up, was it his dead mother or pony mother? The complexities of this story are truly starting to confuse me.

Well, that was... something. Congrats on making an obvious trollfic.

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