Sodas story

by cloudlionheart

Chapter 2

When soda had awoken the next day he heard a knowck at the door he soon opened it to find his friend snowball"Goodmorning soda!"snowball said cheerfully.Snowball was a fluffy pony with white fur and red eyes she wasn't quite as fluffy as the others landing her somewhere around the lines of average pony intelligence.

"Snowy it's great to see you hey, could you stay here for a second and let me get something."Soda quickly ran inside and grabed the black hat he was given yesterday as well as two ice cold sodas labled colt cola.

"What's with the trilby?"asked snowball curiosly

"It was given to me by a salesman who said it'd make me more confident and it feels like it's working"soda said as he walked out with the sodas for him and his friend.with a quick movement of his hoof he was able to open the sodas and he handed one to snowball.After drinking the colt cola Soda began to speak"you know snowy that griffon has inspired me to get out there and do something and i know just what i want to do,I want to become a traveling soda salesman!"soda said confidently.

"Soda look!"snowball said excitedly as soda turned he saw a cutie mark apearing on him it was a bottle of uncapped soda.

"Oh my gosh i finally got my cutie mark!"soda said ecstaticly.

"But if you're gonna be a traveling salesman doesn't that mean you'll have to leave town?"snowball asked sadly

"Snowy don't you worry about me leaving if you want to you can come with me even!"soda replied.

"Really?said snowball.

"Of course,i could always use help carrying around the caravan!"

Author's Note:

I'll be adding on to this and this is my first story so it's probably not all that great.

Comments

[ThunderWonder]

Your grammar is pretty bad, so you might wanna get an editor to help you. The description suggests that you aren't a native speaker of the English language though, so it's certainly understandable. Props to you for learning a new language. Might I ask what language you originally speak? I'm just curious.

I like the base concept for this story, as it could be pretty fun, but the pacing just isn't all that great. Still can't bring myself to click the dislike button on this story, but I also can't like it either. Good luck with learning the English language!

[cloudlionheart]

5441890 thank you very much for your input sir or madam,my first language is Italian thank you for asking and I'm sorry I couldn't answer earlier a lot has been happening with me Which is why I won't be able to add on to it very often.