• Member Since 14th Apr, 2012
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Applebloom goes to school and it is the same day every day when diamond tiara bullies her. But one day a certain stallion from another planet comes and decides to become her mentor.will his advice help her? Read and find out. And no my OC is not in this. Cover photo made by me.

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Comments ( 11 )

Improve the grammar, because, as of now... YOU MAKE ME SIC!

Tips: Capitalize the title and chapter name.
Start a new line when a different character starts talking.
Hit Enter TWICE, no more, no less, after each paragraph.
Use commas in the right places. You should be able to read everything out loud and only take a breath at punctuation. (Quotation marks excluded)

546875 Highly agreed :pinkiesick:

546875 I will try to improve that thank you
Its hard to type a fanfic on an Android phone.:ajbemused:

549147 Wait. You typed that on a phone? :twilightoops:

Who's Marshall Bruce Mathers III? How is this a crossover? :rainbowhuh:

566709 Seriously?:rainbowhuh: Marshal Bruce Mathers III is the real name of one of the most badass white rappers.:rainbowlaugh:

566709 Known as Eminem, slim shady, etc

LOTS of mistakes with grammar and mechanics, but a cool story idea. I'm interested to see where this goes.

I don't really care about any mistake I just want to now what going to happen.
Please write more please:derpytongue2:

Lose yourself reference?
COOL!

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