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Pon3's worst nightmare

After a night of binge drinking, Vinyl learns of something horrible. But will she be able to cope with this new loss?

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Jimmy Lethal

Jimmy Lethal #1 · Oct 19th, 2014 · · ·

That, um... hit me like a sack of bricks. I might've had to pause a bit. Good work.

KiraOnlinePony

KiraOnlinePony #2 · Oct 19th, 2014 · · ·

5157473 Actually, no. It's just, I'm a big baby for stories like this and I know NeonScratch is pretty popular so...

Suprly

Suprly #3 · Oct 19th, 2014 · · ·

Beautiful.. absolutely beautiful.. keep up the good work!

FoolRegnant

FoolRegnant #4 · Oct 19th, 2014 · · ·

Hmm. Not a big fan of NeonScratch, much more into OctaScratch. The writing itself was okay, seemed a little off at a few points, the dialogue wasn't great, and honestly the time skips/ flashbacks were really poorly mixed into the story. Decent, but far from great.

Thetrainenthusiast

Thetrainenthusiast #5 · Oct 19th, 2014 · · ·

Pretty good. Definitely hit me in the feels. Something i'd recommend though is to not rush through the story. Vinyl's flashbacks seemed to tell her love story with neon too quickly even with some moments in the flashbacks feeling rushed. Just some criticism to help you improve