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Astral Star and Company


An enthusiastic group of fans, getting together and sharing our ideas!

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Ever since the Crystal Empire appeared, something had been amiss. A disappearance, here or there, nothing more. Then, their bodies turned up on the street. A plague quickly overtook the land, spreading the seeds of insanity and paranoia across Equestria. Years afterward, Doctor Sparkle and her broken friends find themselves in the middle of this celestial conflict. It is up to them, to stop the sickness.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 5 )

Ohh very dark. I like it! I don't play league of legends so I didn't understand the references completely in the first chapter but I got the basic gist of it. Good job on that.

And why is twilight so mad at Celestia or whoever is controlling the sun? Can't wait to find out!

Weird that this got what seems to be immediate dislikes. I mean, it's not outstanding, but it isn't bad at all.

I'm a League player, and I guess the level of explanation here is reasonable. It doesn't distract too much for people that know or don't know the setting in my eyes. I don't remember Nocturne's nightmares killing people to the level they seem to be in this MLP setting, but I guess that can be an attribute of AU too. And, well, it seems like this is building up properly for something. The Crystal Ponies dying first isn't a coincidence, especially given the importance that the Crystal Heart might have later, as suggested in the image and title. And the pace is OK. You're doing a pretty good job. My only advice is to watch how many times you make the ponies sigh. That seemed to happen an unnatural lot.

Keep up the good work!

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No worries, this kind of thing is new for us too, so any feed back is appreciated. Also, we're trying to mimic the way he killed before his actual appearance on the twisted treeline, hence the insanity. When he does appear, we want it to be good.

holy shit... this is amazing. nocturne is as crazy as he is in league Q^Q

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